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IELTS: pie chart writing Please help me correct the article! Thanks a lot^^ A quick glance at two charts present the ratio of energy use and greenhouse gas emissions in an average Australian household. According to the former chart, heating takes first place with 42% energy use in an average Australian household. In six place is cooling, which has relatively small ratio of 2% energy use. Moreover, in the latter chart, water heating generates most greenhouse gas ranging from 31% emissions to 33% emissions. Lighting is ranked 5th and cooling is in 6th place with the former standing at 8% greenhouse gas emissions and 3% greenhouse gas emissions the latter. In conclusion, heating usage in Australian household is nearly 3 times as many percentage as greenhouse gas emissions of heating and the ratio of other appliances is approximately 2 times higher in greenhouse gas emissions than that in energy use.

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IELTS: pie chart writing

Please help me correct the article! Thanks a lot^^

A quick glance at two charts presents the ratio of energy use and greenhouse gas emissions in an average Australian household.

According to the former chart, heating takes first place, with 42% energy use in an average Australian household. In sixth place is cooling, which has a relatively small ratio of 2% energy use. Moreover, in the latter chart, water heating generates the most greenhouse gas, ranging from 31% emissions to 33% emissions. Lighting is ranked 5th and cooling is in 6th place with the former standing at 8% greenhouse gas emissions and 3% greenhouse gas emissions for the latter.

In conclusion, heating usage in an Australian household is nearly a 3 times higher percentage than the greenhouse gas emissions of other appliances and is approximately 2 times higher in greenhouse gas emissions than that of other energy usage.

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