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FCE Writing Task Around the world, people are living and staying healthy for longer and longer. What changes does this bring to today’s society? Are these changes good or bad? Right now the world is populated by seven billion people, and this number is increasing. For that we have to thank the improvement in life conditions and the progresses in medicine and healthcare, which caused people to live longer and better. One of the main consequences of longevity concerns the elderly: how will the society take care of them?We have to consider, above everything, that we are talking of active people: we can't just put them in a resthome and forget them, this would be a wastefulness. Obviously they can't continue working, because their place must be taken by someone younger who needs it; we should think about how to use their experience and wisdom. In a world that gets more and more globalized, and parents who are more and more involved in their jobs, grannies and grandpas could be a precious resource. Moreover, their time could be employed in activities of voluntarism for the community. At some point, unfortunately, health gets worse and retired people will need more help than they can give; this doesn't mean that they will become a weight for their families or even the society, because a lot of people works to take care of them: doctors, nurses and operators of the centres for the elderly. Till now, I couldn't think of bad changes because of people living longer: in a society everyone is important and can do something for the community, the most important thing is not to be victims of prejudices.

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FCE Writing Task

Around the world, people are living, and staying healthy, for longer and longer. What changes does this bring to today’s society? [How does this change today's society?]  Are these changes good or bad?

Right now the world is populated by seven billion people, and this number is increasing. For that we have to thank improved life conditions and the progresses in medicine and healthcare, which caused people to live longer and better. One of the main consequences of longevity concerns the elderly: how will the society take care of them?We have to consider, above all, that we are talking about active people: we can't just put them in a rest home and forget them; this would be a wastefulness. Obviously they can't continue working, because their place is needed by younger people who have a greater need; we should think about how to use their experience and wisdom. In an increasingly globalized world that gets more and more globalized, in which parents who are more and more involved in their jobs, grannies and grandpas [grandparents]  would be a precious resource. Alternatively, their time could be employed in volunteer activities of voluntarism for the community.
At some point, unfortunately, health declines and retired people will need more help than they can give; this doesn't mean that they will become a weight for their families or even the society, because a lot of people works to take care of them: doctors, nurses and operators of the centres ["centers" (if your audience is American)] for the elderly.
Until now, I couldn't think of any bad changes because of people living longer: in a society everyone is important and can do something for the community, the most important thing is not to be victims of prejudices.

[Just so you are aware, there are also several punctuation issues, like run-on sentences, that I overlooked.  Hope this helps you.]




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