The person I admire is ...
I admire Mark Zuckerberg who is co-founder of the social-networking website Facebook, furthermore he is one of the world's youngest billionaires. Although I don't know him personally, he is the model I'd wish to follow in the future.
When I got into the computer technology world, I must confess, I started to be interested on web development and user interface development, because every single code line which I type they show as a shaped idea who anybody can see and interact with it.
First of all, he has such a successful professional profile as entrepreneur, web developer and leader. I have learned from him that I have the ability to do what I really love to do and even if I am not looking to make money, and I am convinced that if I do it, I might do it easily.
All I want to try in my short life is deal with those challenges in the life, be a kind person and share everything related with my knowledges, teach them and learn more from my colegues and society in general. I have read a lot about him and the keys to succes he follows. In conclusion that´s why I like so much his philosophy in all those aspects.
On the other hand I would like to take part in a developing work team, I trust that we all together will combine our ideas and knowledges to be able to create an innovation for anyone else, just for the purpose of help to solve a need, and the best part is have to do what I like doing.
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The person I admire is...
I admire Mark Zuckerberg who is the co-founder of the social-networking website Facebook. Furthermore, he is one of the world's youngest billionaires. Although I don't know him personally, he is the model I'd wish to follow in the future.When I got into the computer technology world, I must confess I started to be interested in web development and user interface development, because every single line of code which I type is an idea that anybody can see and interact with it.
First of all, Mark Zuckerberg has such a successful professional profile as an entrepreneur, web developer and leader. I have learned from him that I have the ability to do whatever I really love to do and even if I am not looking to make money and I am convinced that if I try, I will succeed.
My goals in my short life are to face with those challenges in the life, be a kind person and share everything related with my knowledges. I want to teach them and learn more from my colleagues and society in general. I have read a lot about Mark and the keys to success he follows. In conclusion, that´s why I like so much his philosophy in all those aspects.
In addition, I would like to take part in a developing work team. I trust that we all together will combine our ideas and knowledges to be able to create and innovate to help to fulfill needs. The best part is that I will do what I like doing.
Could you help me to correct this If I made a mistake, please?
Good job! Your English is very good! Apologies if my corrections changed the meaning of anything.
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Jessica, this is very good.
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