Cause and effect paragraph

For some time now, many women have been working (this tense (called present perfect continuous/progressive) is often used with durations, eg. "for some time now) outside the home. There are many reasons for this work. For the majority of them, it's working for earn addition money and to have better life (remember: nearly all sentences in English MUST have a subject (فاعل)). Another reason , this is that society needs that women to sometimes working outside of/their home because some work are is specially suited to women and they can do this of these jobs better than men, like nurse and sometime they work such men some jobs like firefighters and we need to have both of sexes. The third reason that I think that many women working, is to promotion station of them promote their status in society. These reasons show women have high capacity and they can work outside their homes like men and they can undertake many jobs. It’s very good that Women working outside their home is very good but we don’t shouldn't forget that their main duty’s women is training of their raising children.

It was good, I understood all your ideas, just be careful with "that" (often different to که), make sure to conjugate (صرف کردن) your verbs, give all your sentences subjects (فاعل), etc. Also avoid repeating the same words (like "work") and practice your linking expressions (such as, for example, although, etc.)

New words

For the majority of them

promote one's status [in society]

raise children