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This happened a few years ago, my fiends and I wento to Calella beach. My boyfriend is the driver, recently that he has the driver's license, so I did't belive he can drive well, but anyway, we couldn't find another driver. When we began go to Calella we knew that day will have traffic jam, instead of take the motorway we need take another one.
The motorway is larger than other, and is easy to lost. At first we were going in the right direction, then we took the wrong exit. What happened? because he didn't believe me and didn't take exit I said. I was angry with him, because I was worried about check-in. Fortunately, in the village we found a person who has directed us to the address correctly, as soon as posible we wento to Hotel, in the last moment we had done the check-in.
Although we had problems with the journey, We has a great Sunday in Calella beach, the beautidul sunny morning put us in a happy mood. We still exicited about that day when we remembered.
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Although we had problems with during the journey, W we has a great Sunday in Calella beach, : the beautidful sunny morning put us into a happy mood (* or: "put us back in happy mood"). We are still exicited about that day when we remembered recalled it.
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Hi, what a trip, hah? :)
There are 2 mistakes that were repeated in the whole writing so I think it'll be easier for you to go through the corrections if I mentioned them here already:
1. The trip was in the past so you have to use Past tense to tell about it.
2. The sentences are often very long without conjunctions (something to connects ideas in a sentence or between sentences such as: and, but, then, therefore, so, etc...) so it'll be much better if you either separate them into another sentence or use conjunctions.
Hope it helps. Let me know if you don't know why a certain correction was made.
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Something in happy (-> Happy memories / A nice trip /etc..)
This happened a few years ago, when my friends and I wen to to Calella beach. My boyfriend is was the driver, recently that he has the driver's license, (-> but he's just got his driver license recently) so I didn't belive trust that he can could drive well, but anyway, we couldn't find another driver (had no other choice). When we began to go to Calella we knew that day will have there would be traffic jam, therefore/so/thus instead of take (>taking) the motorway we need to take another one. (*: This was not clear which motoway you're talking about (obviously there are more than one here) so maybe you can specify it, like "...the A1 motorway, we need to take another.")The motorway (we chose) is was larger than other, and is was easy to be lost. At first we were going in the right direction, but then we took the wrong exit. What happened? because he My boyfriend didn't believe me and didn't take the exit I said told him. I was angry with him, because I was worried about check-in (in our hotel later) (*: otherwise it's hard to know check-in in what?). Fortunately, in the village we found a person who has directed us correctly to the address correctly, as soon as posible we wento to Hotel, in the last moment we had done the check-in. (-> *: better into a new sentence: We went as soon as possible to the hotel we had booked and was able to check-in the last minute.)
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