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IELTS Writtig Task №1 Essay №2 The task: The flow chart below details the hiring process of a company. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. The answer: The diagram illustrates detailed information about recruitment process in an organization. There are some numbers of steps in order to consider a candidate before giving a job offer. Some stapes are made by a candidate and also an employer executes some actions. According to the flow chart, firstly a candidate should send his or her CV to a potential employer. A HR helper considers a resume and decides a person fits or doesn’t for an organization. So HR assistant can translate CV to an employer or give a negative answer to a candidate. This is a starting point of selection. The second step is valuating of CV by an employer. After reading there are two ways for an employer: to refuse or to invite on an interview. If there is a positive answer a candidate is invited on a meeting. This is the middle point of selection. The personal conversation with a candidate is the third step in a process and the least point of selection. If an interview is ok, a candidate is taken to a position in a company. To sum up, a candidate should go through three stages of selection.

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IELTS Writtig Task №1 Essay №2

The task: The flow chart below details the hiring process of a company. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

The answer:

The diagram illustrates detailed information about the recruitment process in an organization. There are a number of steps in order to consider before making a candidate  a job offer. Some stages are performed by a candidate and also the employer executes some actions. 


According to the flow chart, firstly a candidate should send his or her CV to the employer. A HR helper considers a resume and decides whether a person is a good fit  for the organization. So the HR assistant can forward  the CV to the employer or give a negative answer to the candidate. This is the starting point of the selection process.

The second step is the evaluating of the CV by the employer. After reading it there are two options for an employer: to decline the application or to invite the candidate for an interview. This is the middle point of selection.


The personal conversation with a candidate is the third step in the process and the final stage  in the selection process. If an interview is agreeable, a candidate is given a position in the company.

To sum up, a candidate should go through three stages of selection.


Hello Svetlana,

The biggest problem with your essay is your understanding of the question. Although it uses the indefinite article in the question because it is the first time they mention it, after that it is the same company so you should use the definite article (the) in your essay.

There are a few expressions (in yellow) which I think should be used in the description too.


Hope this helps


Bob

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