The View of Paradise

I wish I could find a place where I could breathe
where my imagination could be free (?)
let me show you ......x4
take my hand and come for a walk
we can enjoy the view of paradise
the same one we used to think about when we were young
in fact you and I know what it is
the world wasn't made for us
let's go away...oh oh
the view of paradise....


Hi,there! It would be great if someone could read this ...
I think it's going to be a song in the near future... :P
I'd like to receive some feedback on my grammar
Thanks a lot!

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The word "paradise" normally doesn't have an article. It's the same with "heaven".

I changed "I wish I found" to "I wish I could find". If you use "I wish I found", you're expressing a wish about changing the past. If you use "I wish I could find", you're talking about the present and future.

You might change "the view" to "a view", depending on which shade of meaning you're aiming for. If you say "the view" then it's assumed the listener already knows the view you're talking about, or that you've got a particular view in mind.

"Where my imagination could exist" is an unusual phrase. It's very unusual to imply that you have zero imagination right now.

Let me know if you have any other questions, and good luck with the song!

the view of the paradise