IELTS Essay - 01/02

Hi everybody. I am studying to take the IELTS test. I am practicing the writing task, so I wrote the following letter. I would appreciate any correction or comment to write it better.

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Modern computers are able to execute very complex tasks. From giving the best route for your daily commute to flying planes, computers are present in almost every activity of our lives. In the future, we expect the increasing use of computers to affect our lifestyle  more and more. They could (may) be used for self-driving cars, automated home appliances and robotics. There is some research focused on integrating computing systems with the human body to improve human abilities or to cure diseases. Nevertheless, there is intense discussion as to whether we should accept our dependence on computers or not.

No one can deny that computers and technology make our lives easier. In the future we may not spend time driving a car, instead we could just sit and read, listen to music or have a business meeting, while our self-driving car gets us to our destination. There may be automated systems and robots that will complete our chores without human supervision.

However, we cannot forget the inherent risks of technological development. One of the most prominent figures in modern science is Dr. Stephen Hawking. In a recent lecture he stated that most threats for humans will come from science and technology. As computers become more powerful, it would be more difficult to control them. He warns about the importance of  'controlled technology development' in order to eliminate the risks of harm to humankind.

In conclusion, computing and technological development must be undertaken carefully in order to take advantage of it whilst  avoiding potential risks to our existence.

IELTS Essay - 01/02

Hi everybody. I am studying to take the IELTS test. I am practicing the writing task, so I wrote the following letter. I would appreciate any corrections or comments to write it better.

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?

Modern computers are able to execute very complex tasks. From giving the best route for your daily commute to flying planes, computers are present in almost every activity of our life. In the future, we can expect an increased massive use of computers affecting more and more our life style. They could be used for self-driving cars, automated home appliances and robotics. There is are some researches focused on integrating computing systems to the human body to improve human abilities or cure diseases. Nevertheless, there is a heated  algid discussion on whether we should accept our dependence on computers or not.

No one can deny that computers and technology make our lives easier. In the future we would not spend time driving a car; instead we could just sit and read, listen to music or make  have a business meeting, while our self-driving car takes gets us to our destination. There will be automated systems and robots that will complete our chores without human supervision.

However, we cannot forget the inherit risks of technological development. One of the most prominent figures in modern science is Dr. Stephen Hawking. In a recent lecture he has stated that most future threats for humans will come from science and technology. As computers become more powerful, it may would be more difficult to control them. He warns about the importance of a controlled technology development in order to eliminate the risks of harm to humankind.

In conclusion, computing and technological development must be done carefully in pursuance of taking advantage of it and avoiding risks to our existence.

IELTS Essay - 01/02  ------------I simply checked for grammar not essay structure or overall coherrence. 

Hi everybody. I am studying for the to take the IELTS test. I am writing this essay in order to practice for the writing task. I am practicing the writing task, so I wrote the following letter. I would appreciate any correction or comment on how to improve my writing. to write it better.  - NOTE: this is not a letter because you didn't start with salutations. 

We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used for in future What purpose may computers serve in the future? Is this our dependence on computers a good thing or should more caution be practiced we be more suspicious of their benefits? (I am not sure about UK but IN USA personal pronouns are a NO NO in essays.)

Modern computers are able to execute very complex tasks. From giving the best route for your daily commute to flying planes, computers are present in almost every activity aspect of our life lives. In the future, we expect a massive uses of computers affecting more and more our lifestyle even more. They could be used for self-driving cars, automated home appliances and robotics. There are some researches focused in integrate on integrating computing systems to with the human body in order to improve human abilities or cure(disease can't be cured by joining a computer with your body) detect diseases before their onset. Nevertheless, there needs to be a an (algid wrong usage) discussion on whether we or not to accept our dependence on computers.

No one can deny that computers and technology make our lives easier. In the future, we would not will no longer spend time driving a car. Instead, we will utilize that time for our betterment. could just sit and read books, listen to music or make a business meeting, while our self-driving car gets us to our destination. (laundry list, verbose) Also, there will be automated systems and robots that will complete our chores without human supervision.

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