Healthy body
In Japan, many women think that being slender is being beautiful. There are a lot of too slim fashion models and actors in media, so people try to be like that.
Of course, obesity is not good for their health, but almost of all people who try to reduce their weight are not fat. Recently, even elementary school students are trying to be more slender. I think it's strange because eating well is really important to young people.
Um......I know many my friends say that "Mino is fat" but I won't be on a diet. Oh, no no no no! I'm not fat, I'm just...a little bit chubby...I think lol. We say chubby "ぽっちゃり pocchari"in Japanese , pocchari girls are popular among few boys.lol
Um...I want to be slender butI just...really really really love to eat!!! lol
That's all. haha
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Healthy body
In Japan, many women think that being slender is being beautiful. There are a lot of too slim fashion models and actors in media, so people try to be like that.Of course, obesity is not good for their health, but almost of all people who try to reduce their weight are not fat. Recently, even elementary school students are trying to be more slender. I think it's (that) strange because eating well is really important to young people.
Um......I know many my friends say that "Mino is fat" but I won't be on a diet. Oh, no no no no! I'm not fat, I'm just...a little bit chubby...I think lol. We say chubby "ぽっちゃり pocchari"in Japanese , pocchari girls are popular among few boys.lol
Um...I want to be slender but I just...really really really love to eat!!! lol
That's all. haha
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You write well Mino! I just did some corrections or give some advices... as erease "too" because sounds exaggerated like if they were only bone and skin lool ahaha (if this the idea that you wanted to pass is correct), bear in my mind that is not wrong xD
Congratulations! Keep up the good work o/
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Healthy body
In Japan, many women think that being slender is being beautiful. There are a lot of too slim underweight fashion models and actors in media, so people try to be like that.Of course, obesity is not good for their health, but almost of all all of the people who try to reduce their weight are not fat. Recently, even elementary school students are trying to be more slender. I think it's strange because eating well is really important to for young people.
Um......I know many my friends say that "Mino is fat" but I won't be on a diet. Oh, no no no no! I'm not fat, I'm just...a little bit chubby...I think lol. We say chubby "ぽっちゃり pocchari"in Japanese , pocchari girls are popular among few boys.lol
Um...I want to be slender but I just...really really really love to eat!!! lol
That's all. haha
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You have great grammar and you are easy to understand. Also I wouldn't worry about being chubby lol. You can be pretty and get a boyfriend at any size. I'm very chubby and have a loving relationship. so I don't think it really matters as long as you try to be healthy.
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