Special presents
In my last birthday my father gave me a mobile phone and a ticket for the cinema, and enjoyed it so much because I was expecting one a long time ago. Then in the last Christmas I received a lot of clothes and a new laptop I were very happy also.
My favourite present for my, in my past, was when my father gave me a beautiful dog two years ago and his name was “Joselito”. I loved a lot that dog. But then he was sick and died, I was very sad.
I generally love the presents, but right now I prefer clothes. In the future I would like to receive more clothes and a new mobile phone.
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Special presents
In my last birthday, my father gave me a mobile phone and a ticket for the cinema, and [ I ] enjoyed it so much because I was expecting one a long time ago. Then in the last Christmas I received a lot of clothes and a new laptop, I were very happy also. [ was also very happy. ]My favourite present *for my, in my past, was when my father gave me a beautiful dog two years ago and his name was “Joselito”. I loved a lot that dog. But then he was sick and died, I was very sad.
I generally love the presents, but right now I prefer clothes. In the future I would like to receive more clothes and a new mobile phone.
1. You need to state that it was you who enjoyed the gifts, up to this point, the subject of the subject was your father.
2. You need a comma here so the sentence flows better. Don't worry, it will make more sense with more practice. You could also say "and" here.
3. "Were" is used for plurals. "Was" is for singulars. There's only one you, so you would use "was." Also, there are multiple ways you could say you were also very happy, but my suggestion in your entry is probably the most common.
4. You have a "my" in "my present" saying that it's yours, so you don't need to say that it's yours again :)
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Special presents
In On my last birthday my father gave me a mobile cell phone and a ticket for the movie theater , and I enjoyed it so much because I was expecting one a long time ago I had wanted those for a long time. Then the last Christmas I received a lot of clothes and a new laptop I were which made me very happy also.My favourite present for my, in my past, so far was when my father gave me a the beautiful dog my father gave me two years ago and his name was “Joselito”. I loved a lot that dog a lot. But then he was became or got sick and died and I was very sad.
I generally love the presents (gifts are more commonly used), but right now I prefer clothes. In the future I would like to receive more clothes and a new mobile cell phone.
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