IELTS writing practace
Some people think that in modren societies academic qualifications are not important anymore and what we need is social skills.To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Nowadays，some people tend to believe that social skills are much more useful than academic qualifications in the career lives. My opinion is that these two types of skills are both important in our social lives, we cannot ignore any one of them.
The academic qualification shows people's academic background and specialized knowledge, and in the company most of the employee will consider about academic levels to judge the job applicators. However some people think this assess way is not fair, and it may easy to get prejudice. But to be honest, evaluating other kind of skills can be more tough than academic, so judge the qualification may be the simple one.
Except academic qualifications lots of people also believe social skills are very useful . Today cooperations between companies and countries are very common, good communication skills and well teamwork spirits can improve the efficiency of work. People who with good social skills may easy join company teams and feel the sense of belonging to a team. Also, social skills may help people to enlarge the circle of friends, and enrich their lives, relieve their stress from work.
In summary, academic qualifications are important in finding a job and personal development, if a person has high level qualification but poor interpersonal skills, it is difficult for him to succeed. To communicate and cooperate with others are become useful parts in offices and our lives. Both academic levels and social skills are important ,it is hard to get succeed, if without one of them.
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IELTS writing practace
Some people think that in modren societies academic qualifications are not important anymore and what we need is social skills.To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Nowadays，some people tend to believe that social skills are much more useful than academic qualifications in their career lives. My opinion is that these two types of skills are both important in our social lives, we cannot ignore either one of them.
Academic qualifications show people's academic background and specialized knowledge, and in a company most of the employees will consider about academic levels to judge the job applications. However some people think this way of assessing people is not fair, and it may easy to be prejudiced. But to be honest, evaluating other kinds of skills can be tougher than academic, so judging qualifications may be the simplest way.
Apart from academic qualifications lots of people also believe social skills are very useful. Today cooperation between companies and countries are very common, good communication skills and good teamwork spirits can improve the efficiency of work. People who have good social skills may easily join company teams and feel the sense of belonging to a team. Also, social skills may help people to enlarge their circle of friends, and enrich their lives, relieve their stress from work.
In summary, academic qualifications are important in finding a job and personal development. If a person has high level qualifications but poor interpersonal skills, it is difficult for him to succeed. To communicate and cooperate with others are becoming useful skills in offices and our lives. Both academic levels and social skills are important, it is hard to succeed without both of them these days.
Hello Fio,
Task response: the text addresses the main points but I think some of them could be developed further.
Coherence and cohesion: the work is correctly laid out in paragraphs and the paragraphs follow a logical sequence. There is some good use of connectors but one error at the beginning of paragraph 3.
Lexical resource: There seems to be an adequate range of vocabulary, although there are some spelling mistakes
Grammatical range and accuracy: Some errors in grammar patterns but they do not stop the message from getting passed.
Overall I believe that this text would be judged in the 6-6.5 area.
Hope this helps
Bob
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