Corrections · 5
People of Menglait
My day started out with the feeling that I didn't want to get out of bed at all. I only got three hours sleep. It's terrible to wake up with that kind of feeling, like you don't want to go on with your life anymore. Yet, I somehow managed to get up and prepare for work.
As I went down to buy my lunch, The (1) indonesian man asked me in his local language, if I've been on vacation. I just said yes. But honestly, I was taking a different path to go to another restaurant selling pork dishes. I used to eat at his restaurant every day at breakfast time. I didn't think that people would notice when I'm not around. I was so touched by that simple gesture of concern.
I ate my food and drank my coffee. I was trying to drink my coffee before going to work (I'm banned from drinking coffee), its too hot. So I went back to the Indonesian resto and drank my coffee inside the kitchen, to which I have special pass of course. It only took a while for me to do that because uncle (is that what you call the Indonesian Man?) offered me ice.
Walking to work,a lot of people greeted me good morning with a smile and they also waved to me even if they're busy, which I will (2) appreciate that for the longest time, because they are doing this to me every day. It makes me feel elated and extra special to be honest. There's even this guy I came across along my way to work saying that he was the police officer waving at me the other day at the police mobile.
A rough day is waiting ahead of me at work. Yet these people help me to feel valuable in their own way, even though they might not realize it.
So I resolve myself to be the same way to everyone. Who knows? Someone out there might be having a bad day and I might give them a little sunshine.
(1)Normally, you would say 'an indonesian man' because the reader does not know your friend. But because you are about to explain who he is, that he knows and remembers you, it is good to use 'the'. It makes the reader listen, to find out who he is.
(2)Can't help but: implies single moment in time (can't help but notice). For the longest time is so different, the two can't go together, i think.
Great work! When writing, always include a space after a , (comma)
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