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Money Money isn't everything. I briefly believe that it's essential for survive but the most important things can't be bought with it. I think that the consumer society is responsible for trying to have a modern luxurious lifestyle showing it as a must in order to be happy in life. I have bought something I don't really need several times. I remember when I bought a new computer and regretted it. I have some friends and acquaintances that change their mobile phone every year, or even less that in a year. If it works and you're going to buy a new one that has the same functions, why purchase it? Do we need to change all our clothes, our furniture or whatever, every season? My answer is no. Doing that you won't be happier, on the contrary, you won't think highly of anything. So, why do we buy things we don't really need? Just because the society inspire you to buy and buy non stop. It's good that parents show to their children that there are values quite more important instead of too much materialism.

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Money isn't everything. I briefly believe that it's essential for survival but the most important things in life can't be bought with it. I think that the consumer society is responsible for people trying to have a modern luxurious lifestyle, by showing it as a must in order to be happy in life.

I have bought something I don't really need several times. I remember when I bought a new computer and regretted it. I have some friends and acquaintances that change their mobile phone every year, or even less than that in a year. If it works and you're going to buy a new one that has the same functions, why get a new one purchase it? (since you've used "it" at the start of the sentence to refer to the original phone, the second use, "purchase it", is confusing as it seems to refer still to the original phone)


Do we need to change all our clothes, our furniture or whatever, every season? My answer is no. Doing that you won't be happier, on the contrary, you won't think highly of anything. So, why do we buy things we don't really need? Just because the society inspires you to buy and buy non stop.

It's good that parents show to their children that there are values muchquite more important than instead of too much materialism.

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This is very well written, with just a few small mistakes (see my correction). Well done! :)

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