The Music

The Humans is have always had a relationship relationated with the music, since the old man in the cavern.

A months ago a friend make had a party in his house, then arrived some women and friends arrived. The women were crazy, they started to danced to with my friends and me in a sexy way. The next day I was very drunk, then I thought the that music is a way for the people meet and make babies.

For instance the animals use this too, the male bird sings to the female bird to have birds chicks (this is the name for any baby bird). It´s crazy but is true.

Then, you man have the power music of in your hands.

What do you think ?

Hola Daniel. Buen trabajo! En rojo es cosas que usted no necesitan y en verde es cosas que yo añadí. Frases que yo subrayé pienso que son bien pero hay otras opciones. Tengo que decir que estoy impresionar de su uso de "it's". Usted usó ese correctamente y muchas personas que hablan inglés nativo usan "it's" incorrecto. Continua a aprender! :-)

Specific corrections and explanations

I underlined "since the old man in the cavern" because it sounds a little strange to me. It isn't wrong but I think a native speaker would have said "since cavemen" instead.

I underlined "A months ago" because I am not sure if you wanted to say "A month ago" or "A few months ago". I underlined "in" because a native speaker would likely say "at" instead but what you wrote isn't wrong. In English you it is technically incorrect to say "and me" but native speakers do say that a lot. You are supposed to say "and I". I underlined "make babies" because that is very direct, a native speaker would probably say "have children".

General explanation

Because you are a native Spanish speaker you added articles where they aren't needed (por ejemplo es su primero frase, no necesitan "the" en frente de "humans"). That is why I crossed out "the" in a lot of places.