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At the End I Was Crying with Happiness -- This is a short story translated from Russian to pracitce English. If there are any mistakes, please make corrections. Thank you in advance :) -- I got to a hospital right before a New Year's eve. So I wasn't in the mood at all. My parents were in another city. All my friends get together for celebration. And I was staying in a hospital with one old lady, who didn't care about a celebration. It was 30 minutes before a midnight. My friend called me and asked me to go into the hall. I was suprised to see all my closed ones there. They had a champagne, candies and slapsticks. There were some doctors, medical personal and other patients too. At the end I was crying with happiness. Thank you guys.

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At the End I Was Crying with Happiness

-- This is a short story translated from Russian to practice English.
If there are any mistakes, please make corrections. Thank you in advance :) --

I got to a went to the hospital right before a New Year's Eve. So I wasn't in the mood [You weren't in the mood for what? Unfortunately, just saying "I wasn't in the mood" can sometimes be euphemistic for not wanting to have sex. "I wasn't in the mood to party" or "I wasn't in a partying mood" both are a little safer.] at all.

My parents were in another city.

All my friends got together for the celebration. [Better yet is "got together to celebrate."]

And I was staying in the hospital with an old lady woman["old lady" sounds sarcastic.], who didn't care about a celebration celebrating.  

It was 30 minutes before a midnight. My friend called me and asked me to go into the hallway. [I would think of a big room like a concert hall if you just said hall here.]

I was surprised to see all my closed ones friends there. They had a champagne, candies and slapsticks.

There were some doctors, medical personnel and other patients too.

At the end I was crying with happiness.

Thank you guys.

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At the End I Was Crying with Happiness

-- This is a short story translated from Russian to practice English.
If there are any mistakes, please make corrections. Thank you in advance :) --

I was admitted to a hospital right before a New Year's Eve. So I was in a really bad mood.

My parents were in another city.

All my friends got together to celebrate.

And I was staying in the hospital with one old woman, who didn't care about celebrating.

It was 30 minutes before midnight. My friend called me and asked me to go into the hallway.

I was surprised to see all my friends there. They had champagne, candies and slapsticks.

There were some doctors, medical peronnel and other patients too.

At the end I was crying with happiness.

Thank you guys.

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I might actually disagree with this statement... "There were some doctors there too" sounds fine to me. I think both your original and Michael's suggestion work.
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At the End I Was Crying with Happiness

-- This is a short story translated from Russian to pracitce English.
If there are any mistakes, please make corrections. Thank you in advance :) --

I got to a hospital right before a New Year's eve. So I wasn't in the mood at all.

My parents were in another city.

All my friends get together for celebration.

And I was staying in a hospital with one old lady, who didn't care about a celebration.

It was 30 minutes before a midnight. My friend called me and asked me to go into the hall.

I was suprised to see all my closed ones there. They had a champagne, candies and slapsticks.

There were doctors, medical personal and other patients too.

At the end I was crying with happiness.

Thank you guys.

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Hello, Michael. Ok, thanks. I'll edit it.

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