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My experience with a home remedy :)) Hi everybody .. How are you today :)? I hope you all fine Last winter, I and my family went to visit my father's aunt in Abha, southwest Saudi Arabia. In the beginning I was very enthusiastic because of the weather. Unlike my city, Abha was very cold city and the rain fell profusely. Unfortunately, just after 3 hours of our arrival to my aunt's house, I began to feel very tired. my nose suddenly turned to the red color and I could not breath well. I got a really bad cold. My mother said wistfully, " we should take you to the doctor to get a treatment." However, my aunt said confidently," You do not need to visit a doctor, I have the best cure for this illness". Somehow she convinced me. First, she told me gently to warm my feet using a warm water. Then, she dipped a pair of cotton socks in cold water and she got rid of excess water. Finally, she told me to wear them before sleeping. I was very surprised, but the next morning I felt better and after three days my cold went away. It was a traditional, unpopular and strange cure, but Worth the experience! However, The best remedy is still prevention. Always wash your hands and eat healthy food with plenty of vitamins.

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My experience with a home remedy :))

Hi everybody .. How are you today :)? I hope you are all fine.
Last winter, my family and I went to visit my father's aunt in Abha, southwest Saudi Arabia. In the beginning I was very enthusiastic because of the weather. Unlike my city, Abha was a very cold city and the rain fell profusely. (I'm kind of confused because you said the city you are visiting is cold and rainy, but you are enthusiasfic about going there.) Unfortunately, just three hours after our arrival at my aunt's house, I began to feel very tired. My nose suddenly turned red and I could not breathe well. I got a really bad cold. My mother said wistfully, "we should take you to the doctor to get treatment." However, my aunt said confidently," You do not need to visit a doctor; I have the best cure for this illness". Somehow she convinced me. First, she told me gently to warm my feet using warm water. Then, she dipped a pair of cotton socks in cold water and she got rid of the excess water. Finally, she told me to wear them before sleeping. I was very surprised, but the next morning I felt better and after three days my cold went away. It was a traditional, unpopular and strange cure, but worth the experience! However, the best remedy is still prevention. Always wash your hands and eat healthy food with plenty of vitamins.

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My experience with a home remedy :))

Hi everybody .. How are you today :)? I hope you are all fine.
Last winter, I (me) and my family went to visit my father's aunt in Abha, southwest Saudi Arabia. In the beginning I was very enthusiastic because of the weather. Unlike my city, Abha was very cold city (no need to repeat) and it was raining heavily (the rain fell profusely). Unfortunately, just after only 3 hours from of our arrival to my aunt's house, I began to feel very tired. My nose suddenly turned to the red color and I could not breath well. I got a really bad cold. My mother said wistfully, " we should take you to the doctor to get a treatment." However, my aunt said confidently," You do not need to visit a doctor, I have the best cure for this illness". Somehow she convinced me. First, she told me gently to warm my feet using a warm water. Then, she dipped a pair of cotton socks in cold water and she got rid of excess water. Finally, she told me to wear them before sleeping. I was very surprised, but the next morning I felt better and after three days my cold went away. It was a traditional, unpopular and strange cure, but Worth the experience! However, The best remedy is still prevention. Always wash your hands and eat healthy food with plenty of vitamins.

 

I enjoyed your story. And liked very much the part with the socks :)

Hopefully, you will get corrections from native speakers too, but I have written my suggestions.

Best wishes

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Thank you Monz and Manuel for your comment!:)
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I want someone to fix my mistakes and advise me to be better in the writing .. please help me I want to learn.

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