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Friends,I need your help. Please correct my mistakes, at least a few. My future depend on it. Thanks You can not connect the dots looking forward; you can only connect them looking backwards Steve Jobs Speaking farewell speech at the graduation, I could not assume that a year later I will boldly speak on behalf of the students in front of the direction of my future university. The story began in the beginning of the first course, when I went to try his hand in a team of student radio, which I had heard a lot before entering. I was offered the position of a journalist and I was delighted, because I always successful wrote an essay competitions of various scale: from the school to the entire republic. I did not know yet that the main representatives of the youth organization of the university, which was the initiator of the project, decided to stop broadcasting on the grounds that the radio restrict their activity because it had become too detached and influential media for students. The only thing that we were allowed to change its name and become an independent project about the life of students. In addition, our leader went out and everything collapsed. There was a small group of enthusiasts who do not want to give up. So we decided to start all over again. Since I was elected a member of the trade union bureau of faculty, whose duty was to help needy students and their recovery, I found it a good idea to talk with the chairman. Our team, together with trade union bureau began to organize charity events whose funds went to help orphans. And in October 2015, we organized the first trip to the kiddies. It was very touching. We began to organize films for students, flash mobs, filmed a video on YouTube, actions against smoking, AIDS, actions to support the rights of students, take part in cleanup in support of the environment, filmed a video on YouTube, organized sporting events. More and more students become interested in the project and participate in our events. Moreover, I interviewed one of the most influential people during the business start-up projects, where I was a volunteer. he proposed to our students to participate in their Championships and he would be happy to work with us.

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Friends,I need your help. Please correct my mistakes, at least a few. My future depends on it. Thanks

You can not connect the dots looking forward; you can only connect them looking backwards
Steve Jobs
Speaking farewell speech at the graduation, I could not assume that a year later I will would boldly speak on behalf of the students in front of the direction of my future university.
The story began in the beginning of the first course, when I went to try his hand in a team of student radio, which I had heard a lot about before entering. I was offered the position of a journalist and I was delighted, because I always successful wrote an essay competitions of various scales: from the school to the entire republic. I did not know yet that the main representatives of the youth organization of the university, which was the initiator of the project, had decided to stop broadcasting on the grounds that the radio restrict their activity because it had become too detached and influential media for students. The only thing that we were allowed to change was its name and become an independent project about the life of students. In addition, our leader went out and everything collapsed. There was a small group of enthusiasts who do did not want to give up. So we decided to start all over again.
Since I was elected a member of the trade union bureau of faculty, whose duty was to help needy students and their recovery, I found it a good idea to talk with the chairman. Our team, together with trade union bureau began to organize charity events whose funds went to help orphans. And in October 2015, we organized the first trip to the kiddies. It was very touching.
We began to organize films for students, flash mobs, filmed a video on YouTube, actions against smoking, AIDS, actions to support the rights of students, take part in cleanup in support of the environment, filmed a video on YouTube, organized sporting events. More and more students became interested in the project and participate in our events.
Moreover, I interviewed one of the most influential people during the business start-up projects, where I was a volunteer. He proposed to our students to participate in their Championships and he would be happy to work with us.
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You cannot connect the dots looking forward; you can only connect them looking backwards 

Steve Jobs
While giving the farewell speech for my high school (or whatever secondary education is called in Belarus) graduation, I could not imagine that a year later I would boldly speak on behalf of students before the leaders of my future university.
This story begins with the first course, trying my hand at student radio, of which I had heard a lot. I was offered the position of Journalist and was delighted, because I had been successful in essay competitions, from those of the school to those of the entire country. I did not yet know that the main representatives of the university's youth organization, the initiator of the project, had decided to stop broadcasting, on the grounds that the campus media had become too detached and influential. We were required to change our name and become an independent project about the life of students. In addition, our leader moved on and everything collapsed. There was a small group of enthusiasts who do not want to give up, so we decided to start all over again.
Since I was elected a member of the faculty's trade union bureau, whose duty it was to help needy students in their recovery, I found it a good idea to talk with the chairman. Our team, together with the trade union bureau, began to organize charity events whose funds went to help orphans. In October 2015, we organized the first trip to visit the kiddies. It was very touching.
Next, we organized films for students, flash mobs, filmed video for YouTube, acted against smoking and AIDS, supported the rights of students, took part in environmental cleanup, and put together sporting events. More and more students became interested in our projects and participated.
As a business start-up project volunteer, I was able to interview an influential person who proposed that our students participate in the national championships. He said that he would be happy to work with us.

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I had to tell the story. what I do to help others, about leadership qualities. This is only part of the essay, the ending is not climbed
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what you tried to cover in your essay?

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