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Should Undergraduates Be Allowed to Get Married When it comes to that whether undergraduates should be allowed to get married or not,different people hold different views.Some people think that the action is very absurd.Undergraduates have no any materials to support their marriage.However,others argue that undergraduates are adultes.Why cannot they get married?Wheighing up these two arguments,I prefer the former. First and formost,undergraduates are still studentds.Study,or even work should be the most important thing for us.And four-year university time is not long,but value.We have to make full use of it instead of losing it on marriage.Besides,marriage means responsibility.one has to be responsible for his wife,for his parents,and even for his children,But how can a undergraduate shoulder such fairs with no material supportings.Last but not least,undergraduates are the hope of the whole nation,of all the society and of the intire famely.We should not let them down. From the foregoing,a natural conclusion can be drawn that getting married when we are still undergraduates is not a clever choice.We need to think it twice.

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Should Undergraduates Be Allowed to Get Married?

When it comes to that whether undergraduates should be allowed to get married or not, different people hold different views. Some people think that such an action is very absurd. Undergraduates have little or no any resources to support their marriage. However, others argue that undergraduates are adults nonetheless. Why should they not get married? Weighing up these two arguments, I prefer the former.

First and foremost, undergraduates are still students. Study, or even work, should be the most important thing for us. And Four-years of university time is not long, but still valuable. We must make full use of it instead of losing it to marriage. Besides, marriage means responsibility. One has to be responsible for one's spouse, for his parents, and even for his children. Yet how can an undergraduate shoulder such responsibility with no material supportings? Last but not least, undergraduates are the hope of the whole nation, of all the society and of the entire family. We the undergraduates should not let them down.

From the above, a natural conclusion could be drawn that getting married while we are still undergraduates is not a clever choice. We need to think it over twice.

Good work - do ask me about any corrections I've made if they are not clear. :)  You'll notice I made the undergraduate gender-neutral in the second paragraph.

One important point: each punctuation mark must be followed by a space. Always. The missing spaces made your essay quite difficult to read.

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