The causes of worldwide land degradation （writing practice）
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The graphs illustrate the causes of worldwide land degradation and different effects on three particular regions during the 1900s. These causes including over-grazing,over-cultivation,deforestation as well as other reasons.
Overall,over-grazing accounts for the largest proportion of the pie chart,which is not only the main reason of land degradation from worldwide, but also of Europe,with 35 percent and 9.8 percent respectively.This is followed by deforestation,at 30 percent.Also,over-cultivation represent 28 percent of the total ,and makes up 11.3 percent of Oceania land degradation.There were still have some other reasons contribute to the less productive of agricultural land,approximately 7 percent.
Particularly,Europe lost around 23 percent of its productive land during this period,this is far more than other regions.Though the Oceania was suffered a lot from over-grazing,at 11.3 percent,but the total land degraded of this region is only 13 percent.North America,which is the least influenced by these reasons,only 5 percent.
In conclusion,these unreasonable and endless human activities should take the main responsibilities for the world land degradation.
(谢谢！！！)
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The causes of worldwide land degradation （writing practice）
(the topic are below)
These graphs illustrate the causes of worldwide land degradation and the different effects on three particular regions during the 1900s. These causes include over-grazing, over-cultivation, deforestation as well as other reasons.
Overall,over-grazing accounts for the largest proportion of the pie chart,which is not only the main reason of for land degradation from worldwide, but also of Europe,with 35 percent and 9.8 percent respectively.This is followed by deforestation,at 30 percent.Also,over-cultivation represents 28 percent of the total, and makes up 11.3 percent of Oceania land degradation in Oceana.There were still have some Other reasons contribute to the lesser productivity of agricultural land,that amounts to approximately 7 percent.
In particular, Europe lost around 23 percent of its productive land during this period,this is far more than other regions.Though the Oceania was suffered a lot from over-grazing,at 11.3 percent,but the total land degraded in this region is only 13 percent. North America, which is the least influenced by these reasons lost only 5 percent.
In conclusion, these unreasonable and endless ongoing human activities should take the main responsibilities are responsible for the world land degradation.
(谢谢！！！)
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Hello Sophia,thanks so much for remind me this important message,i checked it again and found that i made a mistake there ,over-grazing contributed to main causes of worldwide land degradation with 35 percent and largest proportion of land degradation in Oceania region with 11.3 percent,rather than in Europe. Thanks again and good luck in your language learning,haha~
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Hi there, I just want to comment a bit about your writing practice for the ielts writing!
Actually, i couldn't understand what your point was in the first sentence of the 2nd paragraph. According to the pie chart, I can tell over-grazing took the largest proportion among causes of worldwide land degradation with 35%. However, what are the connections between the percentage of Europe you mentioned and the main cause over-grazing?
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