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America’s children like Kite Festival very much, letter K means kite, America’s Kite Festival is March 7th, in that day, many children go to the open air place.

American children like kite festivals very much . The letter 'k' stands for kite . America's top kite festival is on the 7th March , and on that day , many children will to places with an open space.

They would bring their kites. Some kites would be very big, and  some would  be very small. They wouldbe colourful, bright and beautiful.

You cannot use 'are' here because you are thinking about a future event .

Would > used to refer to a situation that you can imagine happening

Each kite has a long line。In order to for the kite to fly in the sky, the children have to start running。

They turn around hands of the spool, and put the line slowly. Now , the kites are fluttering in the sky. They seem how beautiful.

They would turn their spools of lines so that they could release the lines . Soon , the kites would be flutterinfg in the sky . They would look beautiful.

Now all the kites fly very high, some kites fly higher than the other. oh, a kite fly away, its line is Broken. But the children are chasing behind the kite and want to get back to kite. The adults laughing while watching children

The kites would be flying high in the sky , with some higher than the others .

Oh, if a kite flew  away because its string was  broken , the children would run chase after the kite , hoping to get it back . The adults would laugh while watching them .

Note : You are confusing your story with different tenses because its an event that you imagined will happen . so , how can you say you saw the kite flying away when you never mentioned you were there.

If so , then you must start your essay differently. Like> Its was on 7th March , and I was there to enjoy the festival , for example.

Please amend my composition 32

American children like the Kite Festival very much, the letter K means kite, America’s Kite Festival is  March 7th, on that day, many children go to the open air place. They will bring their kites. Some kites are very big, some kites are very small. They are colorful and bright and beautiful. Each kite has a long line。In order to fly the kite in the sky, the children start running。They turn around hands of the spool, and put pull the line slowly. Now, the kites are fluttering in the sky. They seem see how beautiful.

Please amend my composition 32

America’s children like Kite Festival very much, letter K means kite, America’s Kite Festival is March 7th, in that day, many children go to the open air place. They will bring the kite. Some kite are very big, some kite are very small. They are colorful and bright and beautiful. Each kite has a long line。In order to the kite fly in the sky, the children start running。They turn around hands of the spool, and put the line slowly. Now , the kites are fluttering in the sky. They seem how beautiful.

Now all the kites fly very high, some kites fly higher than the other. oh, a kite fly away, its line is Broken. But the children are chasing behind the kite and want to get back to kite. The adults laughing while watching children