Self-introduction for applying part-time English TA in EF

Good morning,

     My name is Chen Ge and my English name is Cherry. I am 27 years old, was born in Hunan province, and my major is English. I’m open-minded, patient, and work hard. What’s more, I like kids very much. There is a very classical line in the movie, Under the Tuscan Sun, “You have to live spiritedly in many directions, never lose your childish enthusiasm, and things will come at your will”. I really like this sentence. When I feel upset, it cheers me up.

     Since I graduated in 2011, I’ve worked in several schools and training centers as a TA or English teacher. In 2012, I worked in a kids English center. The boss and colleagues were all very kind and easygoing, and the lovely kids kids were lovely. I did love that job. In that year, I learned a lot and enjoyed my life. As a TA, you should try your best to cooperate with the TR, enliven the atmosphere, and keep order in classes. Sometimes you are a TA, other times you become a student; sometimes you are an adult, other times you become a child. In the class, you should switch your roles flexibly. Sadly, after one and a half years, I had to resign and move to another city.

     So I came to Huizhou in the second half of 2013. I worked in 2 different private primary schools as an English teacher. But, although the students were very cute, I don’t didn't feel very well, although the students were very cute. Maybe it's because I don’t agree with the way method of teaching kids English in those schools. I think the most important thing for learning a language is communication, but for those schools, and even many other schools in China, examination is a prime consideration. Now I've quit my job and I’m preparing for the civil service examination. Except Aside from studying, I have lots of free time. So, I want to do something interesting. I know EF is a world-famous English training school. If I can work here, I’ll learn more at the same time. Thank you!

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Self-introduction for applying part-time English TA in EF

Good morning, My name is Chen Ge, and my English name is Cherry. I am 27 years old, born in Hunan province and my major is English.I’m open-mined, patient and work hard, what’s more, I like kids very much. There is a very classical line in the movie Under the Tuscan Sun “You have to live spiritedly in many directions, never lose your childish enthusiasm, and things will come at your will”, I really like this sentence, when I feel upset, it cheers me up. Since I graduated in 2011, I’ve worked in several schools and training centers as a TA or English teacher. In 2012, I worked in a kids English center, (Replace , with .) the The boss and my colleagues were all very kind and easygoing, and the lovely kids  the kids were lovely. , I did love loved that job. In that year,I learned a lot and enjoyed my life. As a TA, you should try your best to cooperate with the TR, enliven the atmosphere and keep order in classes. Sometimes you are a TA,. At other times you become a student.;  Sometimes you are an adult and other times you become a child. In the class, you should switch your roles flexibly. Sadly, after one and a half years, (after a year and a half) I had to resign and move to another city. So I came to Huizhou in the second half of 2013,.

I worked in 2 different private primary schools as an English teacher, but I don’t didn't feel very well,. Although the students were very cute, maybe because I don’t agree with the way method of teaching kids English in those schools.

I think the most important thing for learning a language is communication, but for those schools and even many other schools in China, examination is a prime consideration. Now I have just quit my job and I’m preparing for a/the civil service examination. Except Apart/Aside from studying I have lots of free time, so I want to do something interesting interested. I know EF is a world-famous English training school., If I can work here, I’ll learn more at the same time. Thank you!

Easy to understand. The most common mistake was the use of a comma instead of a full stop.