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Roman Coin As is introduced in a textbook on world history for high school, the first systematically minted coin was produced in a kingdom named Lydia that had prospered for two centuries in Asia Minor till Cyrus II subjugated the country in 546 B.C. Persia and Greek poleis imported this useful invention and stroke individual coins; for example, Darius I had his Mint Bureau execute gold and silver coins that were respectively named dareikós and siglos; and poleis like Athens, Corinth, Aegina and so on also produced their coins, and the silver coin minted in Aegina, one of the most powerful mercantile poleis, became the international currency in the Mediterranean world until Rome attained the dominance there. Carried in the course of the expedition of Alexander the Great, the invention made its way even into India. Roman people also introduced this system and began to manufacture coins by themselves in 3rd century B.C. As Rome gradually extended its sway over many parts of Africa, Europe and Asia, its major silver coin called denarius got to be widespread and superseded the Aegina’s silver coin as the international currency of the time. Although coins executed during the period of Roman Republic were of great interest as artistic works with their various design, they must have been fairly confusing for people who used them. The first emperor, Augustus, who showed amazing talents as a commanding general, an orator, and a shrewd politician, demonstrated outstanding savvy in economical affairs. He established a firm criterion with which how the gold coin, the silver coin, and the bronze coin were mutually converted, and decreed that the coins must have been executed according to the national design. The Roman coinage faced a crisis several times with deterioration conducted by some of his incapable successors: however the emperor Constantine bent his assiduous effort to improve the coinage, and the newly minted gold coin, solidus, finally drove out bad coins and circulated in various parts of the world over 1000 years thereafter. After the discovery of a incredible amount of silver in the New World, or the American Continents, the situation of currency in Europe cha

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As it is introduced in a textbook on world history for high school* high school world history textbook, the first systematically minted coin was produced in a kingdom named Lydia that had prospered for two centuries in Asia Minor till Cyrus II subjugated the country in 546 B.C.
Persia and Greek poleis imported this useful invention and stroke individual coins; for example, Darius I had his Mint Bureau execute gold and silver coins that were respectively named dareikós and siglos; and poleis like Athens, Corinth, Aegina, and so on others also produced their own coins. and The silver coin minted in Aegina, one of the most powerful mercantile poleis, became the international currency in the Mediterranean world until Rome attained the dominance there. Carried in the course of throughout the expedition of Alexander the Great, the invention made its way even into India.
Roman people also introduced this system and began to manufacture coins by themselves in the 3rd century B.C. As Rome gradually extended its sway (rule) over many parts of Africa, Europe and Asia, its major silver coin called the denarius got to be became widespread and superseded the Aegina’s silver coin as the international currency of the time.
Although coins executed during the period of Roman Republic were of great interest as artistic works with their various design, they must have been fairly confusing for people who used them. The first emperor, Augustus, who showed amazing talents as a commanding general, an orator, and a shrewd politician, demonstrated outstanding savvy (knowledge) in economical affairs. He established a firm criterion with which how the gold coin, the silver coin, and the bronze coin were mutually converted, and decreed that the coins must have been executed according to the national design.
The Roman coinage faced a crisis several times with deterioration conducted by some of his incapable successors: however the emperor Constantine bent his assiduous effort to improve the coinage, and while the newly minted gold coin, solidus, finally drove out bad coins and circulated in various parts of the world over 1000 years thereafter.
After the discovery of an incredible amount of silver in the New World, or the American Continents, the situation of currency in Europe cha

 

Hi Satomi, I made suggestions in blue. Hopefully you find them useful.
*This sentence was not incorrect, I just rearranged it for clarity. "High school" can modify "world history" which then modifies "textbook". Then you don't need all the small words in between.

(italics)meant a suggested synonym. I thought the word you used felt a little out of place but to be honest, I had to double check the definition of some of the words you were using. Guess I need to work on my vocabulary :).
Stroke and execute

I was slightly confused on what you wanted to convey when you used "stroke." If you can tell me what you meant maybe I can help further.
"Execute" would probably be better said as "distribute".

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