Original in italics, corrections in regular font, and my notes pre-ceeded with a '--'

In 2009 I went to Stockholm, I walked all the morning and, at lunch time, I decided to enter in a restaurant to eat the famuos Swedish soup.
In 2009 when I was in Stockholm, I was walking around all morning and for lunch I decided to go to a restaurant to eat the famous Swedish soup.
-- Removed some of the commas to make the flow a bit more natural.

So I asked for it at the kind waitress and she, whit her big and Swdish smile, accompained me to the bathroom and showed me the SOAP...
So I ordered the soup, and the kind waitress, with her big Swedish smile, accompanied me to the bathroom and showed me the SOAP!

In this moment I got my poor figure, washed my hands and went out from the restaurant.
At that point, I washed my hands and left the restaurant.
-- Apologies, I’m not quite sure what you meant by ‘got my poor figure’.

I didn't eat anything for all the day, I was tired, cold, hungry... but my hands was very clean!
I didn’t eat anything for the rest of the day. I was tired, cold and hungry… but my hands were very clean!