Smartphones

Today I want to tell you about a TV program called Cash Investigation which tells about the shameless secrets of our smartphones. The program illustrates the notion Idea of 'progress' but also spaces and exchanges.

First, the smartphone is a kind of idea of can be said to be a progressive idea because it makes our life more enjoyable, easier and better, and while technology innovations occur very often are done every time. But these smartphones that we have in our pockets also illustrate the notion "spaces and exchanges". I think in spaces and exchanges there is a connection between at least two people, countries, or firms from  of all around the world. And thanks to the smartphone, we can be connected whenever we want to people of throughout the whole world.

Every second, 57 smartphones are sold in across the entire world and most of them by the leaders Samsung and Apple. Their smartphones are the idea of progress, each new one is faster, better and has something new.

We all have the money to pay for it because indeed our countries is are rich. We have what we want for the most of us Most of us have what we want, but we do not know (peut-être la place "realise"?) the other side of the coin: the human condition.

To make a smartphone we need raw materials like ores, and a part of much of these ores are situated in Africa for example, especially in the Democratic Republic of Congo, a southern country. 5 million Congolese die every month in the mines. There are also pregnant women at these places. These people work for 1 Euro the a day. In China, the manufacture manufacturing can be done by children who work unil 13 hours in a row, the human condition is really unhealthy.

Samsung, Apple and Microsoft are pointed out for carelessness and children exploitation. The firms deny this just to make money as usual. Indeed, these firms will not stop their business especially when the margin between the retail price and the price of the material, the software and the production cost is in the order of 300€.

That's how idea where this notion of progress has lead us: to the deaths of more than 5 million people, unhealthy conditions, and all just for profit.

Then   So, is that the kind of 'progress' which makes people's life easier really good ? Knowing that it makes millions of people poorer than ever.

People know what happens in this world, but can't do without their mobile phone.

I link this subject to the idea of progress because it includes technology innovations, the world goes faster and faster thanks to that, and I also link this subject to spaces and exchanges because mobile phones require people of all from around the world and because of the international trade.

- Trés bien, votre anglais est génial. C'est un sujet que m'interesse et j'ai pensé souvent sur ça. J'aime apprendre le langue français, mais je dois amélliore! Most of the corrections I have made relate to phrasing, and I don't think you've made any big errors. The words 'notion' and 'idea' are usually interchangeble, but in the context of your article notion may more suitable because you tend to debate the merits of smatphone technology.