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What is important in my own life right now? I am a 32-year-old man. I work as a teacher in a secondary school and I live with my wife. Nowadays I am working far from home, therefore I find very important to get a job closer. On the other hand, my wife and I love children, so we hope to have children in the near future. Finally, another important aim to me is to keep doing sport, such as cycling and running.

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What is important in my own life right now?

I am a 32-year-old man. I work as a teacher in a secondary school and I live with my wife.Currently/ Nowadays I am working far from home, therefore I find it very important to get a job nearby/closer to where I live.

On the other hand, My wife and I love children, so we hope to have children in the near future. Finally, Another important goal of mine to me is to keep doing sport  such as cycling and running.

 

Currently sounds better than nowsdays . It means now , and nowadays can means this period of time ( as compared to another) eg I hardly go out nowadays ( unlike before)

Dont use 'on the other hand' when you never even mention the first fact that this the 2nd piece of information has to contrast with . I like to drink alot , but, on the other hand , I afraid it may damage my liver .On the other hand> is a phrase introducing an alternate view

I want to work nearby ,but , on the other hand , the job far away pays better.

'Finally' is used when you are at the end of something . You said, 'finally another aim of yours..", but the points you made earlier didnt not reflect them as such .

Unless you stated them clearly : I wish to work neaby , and have a family and ,finally , to have a heathy lifestyle. You can use 'finally' as you have used it( I figure it out after the 3rd reading) , but it can be wriiten better.

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What is important in my own life right now?

I am a 32-year-old man. I work as a teacher in a secondary school and I live with my wife. Nowadays I am working far from home, therefore I find it very important to get a job closer to home. On the other hand Also, my wife and I love children, so we hope to have children in the near future. Finally, another important aim to for me is to keep doing sport, such as cycling and running.

 

My corrections are in red and my suggestions to sound more natural are in blue/grey.

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