Short story

I decided to write little story with words that I have learned:)

Lili got a motorcycle for her birthday, and today she went to the shop to buy a helmet because she wanted to go as fast as possible to try on her new motorcycle. After buying the helmet, Lili decided to drive across the park near her home because it is a quiet place without traffic. Lili was driving with her new bike across the park when she saw that the engine of her motorcycle was leaking. Then she called her Father and they went together to repair Lili's motorcycle.

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Short Story

i decided to write little story with words that I have learned:)

Lili got a motorcycle for her Birthday. And today she goes to shop to buy a helmet because she wants as fast as possible to try her new motorcycle. After buying IT*, she decided to drive across the park near her home, because it is a quiet place without traffic. When Lili drove** with her new bike across the park and she saw that the engine from her motorcycle was leaking. She called her father and they WENT together to repair her motorcycle.

*careful not to omit this. IT is very important.

**'drove' = 'drived'. From When Lili drove... write every verb in the simple past; when (she) drove, (she) saw, ... (cycle) was leaking (=a simple past state). (She) called .. (they) went, .. to repair (to+infinitive, always)