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A new Tower of Babbel
Once upon a time there was a girl called Ruby, She had curly red hair, some freckles in a heart-shaped face in shape of heart and sparkling green eyes sparkling.
She liked so much to travel so much / a lot, but she didn't have a lot of money, so she used to go by foot.. Day after day, step by step Ruby discovered new awesome new places, green valleys crossed by murmuring streams, high mountains covered of with snow, placid lakes and the roaring waves of the sea.
She visited little villages and big cities, and everywhere she went the people was were friendly with to her. There was only a one problem / thing that made her sad, she couldn't understand all the people that she met, everybody people had a their own language.
Ruby was a determinate determined girl, She closed herself in a lonesome lonely castle, where there was the biggest library of the world. Ruby studied hard day and night, all the languages of the world, for seven years, seven months and seven days.
A One night she had a dream, she saw herself in a mirror with white hair and a the face of an old woman, with the skin full of wrinkles, suddendly the image disappeared, she heard a voice say said “ Come to me, I'm Aron and I live in a cave near the castle, I have the solution for your problem “
Ruby understood that she got would grow old before to she had achieved her goal. The day after, in the morning, she left the castle, and looked for the cave. It wasn't difficult to find Aron there was in the wind a sort of voice that guided her steps.
When Ruby reached the cave Aron was sitting in front of a fire and warmed up warming his hands keep them near the flame. He heard immediately heard the Ruby's steps, and turning his head said " Do you remember when the people began to use different languages ? They wanted built to build a tower as tall like as the sky, and God punished their arrogance by destroying the tower “ Ruby replied " I remember ......and God confused their languages " " Every thing " added Aron “ Isn't right or wrong in itself, the most important thing is the goal of the action. You have to build another tower with the help of all the people of the world, There will be a stone for every language, when the tower will be is finished all the people of the world will be able to understand each other “
Ruby began to travel asking for a stone in all the countries ,,,,,so if you a one day will you meet a girl that will asks to you for a stone, please help her.
A new Tower of Babbel
Once upon a time there was a girl called Ruby, She had curlies red hair, some freckles on a face in the shape of a heart and green eyes sparkling.
She liked so much to travel/to travel so much, but she didn't have a lot of money, so she used to go by foot.. Day after day, step by step Ruby discovered new awesome places, green valleys crossed by murmur streams, high mountains covered with snow, placid lakes and the roaring waves of the sea.
She visited little villages and big cities, and everywhere she went the people were friendly with her. There was only a problem that made her sad; she couldn't understand all the people that she met,every person had their own language/every person spoke a different language.
Ruby was a determined girl, She closed/locked herself in a lonesome castle, where there was the biggest library in the world. Ruby studied hard day and night, all the languages in the world, for seven years, seven months and seven days.
One night she had a dream, she saw herself in a mirror with white hair and the face of an old woman, with the/her skin full of wrinkles, suddenly the image disappeared, she heard a voice say “ Come to me, I'm Aron and I live in a cave near the castle, I have the solution for your problem “
Ruby understood that she got old before achieving her goal. The day after, in the morning, she left the castle, and looked for the cave. It wasn't difficult to find Aron; there was in the wind a sort of voice that guided her steps.
When Ruby reached the cave Aron was sitting in front of a fire and warmed up his hands by keeping them near the flames. He heard immediately the Ruby's steps, and turning his head said " Do you remember when the people began to use different languages ? They wanted to build a tower tall like the sky, and God punished their arrogance by destroying the tower “ Ruby replied " I remember ......and God confused their languages " " Every thing " added Aron “ Isn't right or wrong in itself, the most important thing is the goal of the action. You have to build another tower with the help of all the people of the world, There will be a stone for every language, when the tower is finished all the people of the world will be able to understand each other “
Ruby began to travel asking for a stone in all the countries ,,,,,so if you one day will meet a girl that will ask to you for a stone, please help her.
Although people would never speak like this, this is written in a literary style which makes some of your phrasing fine :) IT's very....poetic.
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