IELTS essay(please check and evaluate if possible(which band score you will give me for it)

Women and men are commonly seen as having different strenghs and weaknesses. Is it right to eclude exclude males or females from certain professions because of their gender?
There have always been differences between jobs men and women do in their life.It depends on the sphere of doing *doesn't make sense*, job conditions and type of work.Nowadays most jobs are done both by male and female. But still there are there are still some exclusions especially for women. In my view, in most jobs there should be gender equality.
These days in most cases men and women have equal rights in choosing the job they want to do.But still in some countries women are limited in doing jobs.For instance in most muslims states they are forbidden to work as politicians, directors, managers or car drivers.They can't vote, take part in elections, be members of political parties, drive public or private transport, manage a company. In such countries woman never have an opportunity to be a head of the state and rule the country.They can't even have a right to work in public places amond around men.In these occupations mentioned above males are predominated. This kind of discrimination often occurs because of gender differenciation inequality.
In some jobs women have better understanding of situation and responsibility because of their sensitive nature. So nurces nurses at in hospitals look after their patients in better way. Nurces Nurses in kindergardens and teachers at primary schools may have better understanding of children/'s childrens behaviour and work out effective strategies for teaching kids.
However there are some jobs that are very dangerous and require to deal with phisical strenghs physical strenght to deal with.These jobs should be done by men only.But still in most occupations both men and women can bring various prespective and do any success.There are lots of famous singers, cookers chefs, poets, lawers, waiters among both gender and they are all successfully in their professions.
Both male and female should should have a choice in choosing a job they like. It is important to know that how males and females approache approach work will always will be different and predominant by one of them.