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Work/ life balance Many people want to have a successful career and a happy family life both. What problems are involved in combining a career and family life? How to overcome such problems? It is true that more people nowadays are aware of the importance of achieving a balance between work time and family time. This essay will discuss the obstacles stopping people to do get this and how to overcome them. Obviously, there are a number of hazards with regard to this issue. First of all, the most evident would be that the stressful working schedule. This is basically because that under the environment of fierce competition, people are forced to work long hours with strict deadlines. Therefore, they live under great pressure and do not have time to spend with their family. As well as that, a secondary issue could be that the cost of living is increasingly high. This can be explained by that both parents tend to work full-time to earn enough money to pay the bills. Whereas in the past, women traditionally stayed at home to look after their children and did domestic works. As a result, children may be left alone, or with nannies or babysitters and many families no longer eat meals together. In my opinion, there are several actions that could be taken. To begin with, the most efficient way would be that people could work from home. This is because nowadays technology allows people to do this. Specifically, workers can communicate via email, online networks and video conferencing. In this way, people can have more freedom and companies can save money and time. On top of that, another kind of solution is that people need to take regular holidays. The explanation for this is that they can have more time to enjoy life and get together with friends and family members. As a result, job satisfaction will be raised by a good work/life balance and happy, healthy workers could be more productive. In conclusion, although there are several problems with keeping a work/life balance, companies can take a few steps to tackle them. They should make sure their workers have a happy and healthy life.

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Work/ life balance

Many people want to have both a successful career and a happy family life. What problems are involved in combining a career and family life? How can these problems be overcome?

It is true that more people nowadays are aware of the importance of achieving a balance between work time and family time. This essay will discuss the obstacles which prevent people from doing this and ways of overcoming them.

Obviously, there are a number of hazards with regard to this issue. First of all, the most evident would be that the stressful working schedule. This is basically because in an environment of fierce competition, people are forced to work long hours with strict deadlines. Therefore, they live under great pressure and do not have time to spend with their family. As well as that, a secondary issue could be that the cost of living is becoming increasingly high. This can be explained by the fact that both parents tend to work full-time to earn enough money to pay the bills. Whereas in the past, women traditionally stayed at home to look after their children and did domestic work. As a result, children may be left alone, or with nannies or babysitters and many families no longer eat meals together.

In my opinion, there are several actions that could be taken. To begin with, the most efficient way would be that people could work from home. This is because nowadays technology allows people to do this. Specifically, workers can communicate via email, online networks and video conferencing. In this way, people can have more freedom and companies can save time and money. On top of that, another kind of solution is that people need to take regular holidays. The explanation for this is that they can have more time to enjoy life and get together with friends and family members. As a result, job satisfaction will be raised by a good work/life balance and happy, healthy workers could be more productive.

In conclusion, although there are several problems with keeping a work/life balance, companies can take a few steps to tackle them. They should make sure their workers have a happy and healthy life in order to maintain or even improve productivity.

 

Hello Peng,

 

This is generally fine, I have reversed time and money as this is more natural in English, changed some words up to a higher level to help you more in your IELTS prep and added a reason at the end to round off the essay.

 

Hope this helps

 

Bob

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