Essay school or parents

Please check my essay if there are such mistakes as 'a/the' and others.

Some argue that children need to be taught by parents in order to be upstanding members of the community, whilst others are of the opinion that children should learn this in school. It is agreed that (mother and father) parents are the main role models for children. This essay will discuss both points of view before coming to a reasoned conclusion.

It cannot be argued that school is a place where children could develop their personality and social skills and learn how to behave in society. Moreover, they spend most of their time there interacting with teachers and peers. School is a micro-model of society where challenges face the children. Different problems, for example, a quarrel with other children, allow the child to improve his or her interactive skills while they are thinking of a way how to deal with it.

However, parents are the child’s first contact and they have more influence on children than school. Before children go to school, the foundation of their personality is laid by the mother and the father. It is therefore agreed that parents play the main role in educating the child to become a good person in society. There was an article on this issue and it is said that a child's personality is formed between the ages of one to five.

To sum up, although school is a large part of children’s lives, they are more influenced by their parents. In order to bring up a child to be an upstanding person in society, parents should be the main teachers for children and educate them before they go to school.

Hello Oksana,

Nice essay with just a few small corrections. I think I would use the word parents rather than mother and father in the first paragraph - it sounds more natural and I have also reworded the end of paragraph 3 for the same reason. I have also added a few words in your conclusion to put more space between 'up' and 'upstanding' as again this sounds more natural.

Well done

Bob