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A Trial to Increase Community Population (3) I'd be happy if you'd kindly read this writing, correct it, or give me better and more natural expressions. Thank you. ******************************************************************************: (In a rural village Yamanaka, the population increased twofold, as they have promoted new families’ moving to their village for ten years.) Mr. Yamaoka had moved to this village from Nara Prefecture ten years ago, and told as following. “To tell the truth, when I started to live here, I was worrying at everything and felt totally helpless to do anything, however, the local people eased my anxiety so kindly to accept us.” Now his son’s family enjoys the annual gifts of rice and vegetables raised and sent by Yamaoka himself. Recently he practices playing the ‘fue and taiko’* to take part in their local festival. Their success in Yamanaka Village is getting a lot of attention of many towns and villages here and there which are also suffering from depopulation. ‘fue and taiko’: Japanese traditional instruments; a flute made of bamboo and a drum.

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A Trial to Increase Community Population (3)

I'd be happy if you'd kindly read this writing, correct it, or give me better and more natural expressions. Thank you.
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(In a rural village Yamanaka, the population increased two fold, as they have promoted new families moving to their village for ten years.)

Mr. Yamaoka had moved to this village from Nara Prefecture ten years ago, and told as following.
“To tell the truth, when I started to live here, I was worrying at everything and felt totally helpless to do anything, however, the local people eased my anxiety so kindly to accept us.” Now his son’s family enjoys the annual gifts of rice and vegetables raised and sent by Yamaoka himself. Recently, he practices playing the ‘fue and taiko’* to take part in their local festival.

Their success in Yamanaka Village is getting a lot of attention of many towns and villages here and there which are also suffering from depopulation.

‘fue and taiko’: Japanese traditional instruments; a flute made of bamboo and a drum.

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A Trial to Increase Community Population (3)

I'd be happy if you'd kindly read this writing, correct it, or give me better and more natural expressions. Thank you.
******************************************************************************:
(In a rural village Yamanaka, the population increased twofold,we would more usually say "doubled"  as they have promoted new families’ moving to their village for ten years.) The apostrophe is only required in the case of the possessive, or a contraction - neither applies here)

Mr. Yamaoka had moved to this village from Nara Prefecture ten years ago, and told as following. has this to say.
“To tell the truth, when I started to live here, I was worrying at everything and felt totally helpless to do anything, however, the local people eased my anxiety so kindly to accept us.” Now his son’s family enjoys the annual gifts of rice and vegetables raised and sent by Yamaoka himself. Recently he started to practices playing the ‘fue and taiko’* to take part in their local festival.

Their success in Yamanaka Village is getting a lot of attention of from many towns and villages here and there which are also suffering from depopulation.

‘fue and taiko’: Japanese traditional instruments; a flute made of bamboo and a drum.

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