Video games and children
Nowadays most of video games and films environments are often based on violence and aggression. Many games only offer an arena of weapons, killings, kicking, and shooting so I think parents have to spend more time with their children and help them to choose better entertainments such as do exercise or read a book.
Violent video games may be related to aggressive behavior. The Over-dependence on video games could foster social isolation, as they are often played alone. This kind of entertainments affects the relationship between parents and children and takes children away from the church. I am of the opinion that parents are the only ones who can stop children become addicts to bad habits.
Please help me to correct my paragraph, in advance thanks.
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Nowadays most of video game(s) and film(s) environments are often based on violence and aggression. Many games only offer an arena full of weapons, killings, kicking, and shooting; so I think parents should have to spend more time with their children and help them to choose better things to entertain themselves with, entertainments such as do exercising or reading a book.
Violent video games may be related to aggressive behavior. The Over-dependence on video games could foster social isolation, as they are often played alone. This kind of entertainment(s) affects the relationship between parents and their children and takes children away from the church. I am of the In my opinion that parents are the only ones who can stop children from becoming addicted to bad habits.
In all, pretty good job. Just some gramatical issues, however the entire paragraph is completely readable.
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