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I'll write about my dreams. I would like to travel a lot and to find a job that allows*1 me to do this. I'm curious and so I want to*2 visit new places and to experience new cultures*3. I know that i have to improve my languages, such as*4 my English, French and German*5. I don't know where I will*6 go for my next trip, any suggestions?
*1 It is 'allows' becuase the verb refers back to the noun 'job' therefore it must be conjugated in the 3rd person singular e.g. The job allows me to travel.
This job is boring.
This job provides many opportunities to go abroad.
*2 'I wanna' is very colloquial and I would avoid writing it. It is more spoken English and only ever written down in text messages or on Facebook when trying to emulate English speach patterns.
*3 It is not possible 'to visit a culture' because 'culture' is an abstract noun therefore there is no physical form of it. We can 'experience' an abstract noun, such as culture, but 'culture' cannot affect us physically therefore we must say 'to experience a culture'.
*4 When you want to list things using the word 'as', you must say 'such as'. This is a set phrase. e.g. I enjoy watching British films, such as: Harry Potter, James Bond and Narnia.
*5 When talking about a geographical origin or language, you must write the adjective with a capital letter e.g. I speak English. I go to a Welsh speaking school in the Nothern Wales. I like French culture.
*6 'I will' sounds better here as it is talking about future plans. We don't use the modal verb 'can' when talking about future plans.
Hope my corrections are useful!
Good job! :)
Travel
I'll write about my dreams. I would like to travel a lot and to find a job that allow me to do this. I'm curious and so I wanna/want to visit new places and cultures. I know that I have to improve my languages, such as my English, French and German. I don't know where I can go for my next trip, any suggestions?
travel
I'll write about my dreams. I would like to travel a lot and to find a job that allows me to do this. I'm curious and so i wanna (want to) visit new places and cultures. I know that i have to improve my languages which include english, french and german. I don't know where i can go for my next trip, any suggestions?
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