IELTS Topic Writing 2

Are these shows a good method of finding talented people or are they just entertainment?


Nowadays, a lot of people who want to be popular famous apply for some to TV shows. to success in their life. In my opinion, TV shows would be are a kind of the ways to earn much a lot of money.


I think that TV programs shows are one of the best methods to look for people who have great skills. The primary reason for this is that people have an opportunity to perform their amazing abilities on TV. Secondly, the right person may see these people who have unique talents because the information with them would quickly spread in the world when they are able to express some judges and audiences.

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However, it is true that some TV channels are used by businesses to get a great deal of money. It seems that some TV companies shows need to have money because they have to pay highly guarantee for some for their judges. So some TV companies contract with some big companies to get get a lot of money instead of displaying their advertisement.
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The other reason is that some judges may do unfair judgement. Although many people believe that they always do fair judgement, this problem sometimes happens. For only one big main reason is that some judges would be bought by someone.

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To sum up, there are some reasons why TV shows are easier than other ways and they are just business. Many people believe that people who became a famous on TV shows would succeed. However, it seems to me that TV shows have been used as a tool to earn more money.



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