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Everything Seemed Different... Everything seemed different to Alien. There was no particular reason for it. Or was... she wasn't sure. Alien was just sitting in the University library trying to do some of her homework. But she gazed at something. The look in her eyes was empty. She was numb.The girl was trying to read the paragraph but couldn't because she was thinking about something else. At the first look, her life was completely different. The University, new acquaintances, new hairstyle and now she wasn't so fascinated about Literature as she used to. These changes are only visible ones. There was something new in Alien's soul. But at the same time it was something old and so familiar. What was it? Old habits and fears. They started to grow again. With new strengths.They weren't good, they were cruel, cold and terrifying. Alien knew she couldn't overcome them this time. She hoped that they disappeared from her life forever. But here are they. All. ALL. They opened her heart and almost shouted, "Just look! Here's so empty and cold without us. We definitely should come back. She needs us, our love and our presence. You need us, don't you?". They started unpacking their suitcases. The book, MP3-player, an old photograph and...a mirror. Just a mirror but it was the most dangerous and frightening thing ever. Alien whispered to herself, "Don't look. Don't. Look. Please.Please!". And then she cried because she looked. Now she has a familiar cold look in her beautiful green eyes. She's back to her true self.

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Everything Seemed Different...

Everything seemed different to Alien.
There was no particular reason for it. Or there was... she wasn't sure.
Alien was just sitting in the University library trying to do some of her homework. But she gazed at something.
The look in her eyes was empty. She was numb. The girl was trying to read the paragraphs but couldn't because she was thinking about something else.
At the first look glance, her life was completely different. The University, new acquaintances, a new hairstyle and now she wasn't so fascinated about by Literature as she used to be.
These changes are only the visible ones. There was something new in Alien's soul. But at the same time it was something old and so familiar. What was it? Old habits and fears.
They started to grow again. With new strengths. They weren't good, they were cruel, cold and terrifying.
Alien knew she couldn't overcome them this time. She hoped that they had disappeared from her life forever. But here are they. All. ARE.
They opened up her heart and almost shouted, "Just look! Here's It's so empty and cold without us. We definitely should come back. She needs us, our love and our presence. You need us, don't you?"

They started unpacking their suitcases. The/A book, an MP3 player, an old photograph and... a mirror. Just a mirror but it was the most dangerous and frightening thing ever. 

Alien whispered to herself, "Don't look. Don't. Look. Please. Please!" And then she cried because she looked.
Now she has a familiar cold look in her beautiful green eyes. She's back to her true self.

 

Well, Julia, excellent job once again. :) I know these stories are pretty much just for practicing your English but you always manage to make them interesting. And I swear every time I correct one of your entries it feels like the mistakes are less and less. ^^


Keep studying and writing, you're doing awesome. :D

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