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My Tiny Paradise First Day: It was Saturday when we left home at around 10 o'clock in the morning to visit the place where I spent 18 years of my life. It took me about a year to be home again. When I got there, I was surprised to see how the place has changed - from a plain island to a tiny paradise! The touch of the cool sea breeze seemed to welcome me with pleasure. The tall green trees reminded me of someone who always make me smile and I wished that he was with me to see how beautiful the surrounding was. I could hear the chirping of the birds that sounded like a music in the air. The white sand that gave me peace of mind. The clear blue sky that made all things beautiful on that day. At my back was a beautiful hut. When I went inside the hut, there was a bathroom, a bamboo chair, a small bedroom and a dirty kitchen. I had nothing to say but “wow.” I couldn't believe that I was in such a wonderful paradise. A great deal of lunch was served. We feasted on seaweed salad, grilled pork and fish, shrimps, crabs, mangoes ( my favorite fruit) and bananas. It was perfect! I think the best time was in the afternoon when the sunset touched the sand that created a glimmering yellow hue. I closed my eyes and thought for a while that it would be nice to hold hands with someone while walking along the shore. ( I missed him :<) When the night came, we enjoyed the open sky and built a sand castle. We shared stories and laughed at the top of our lungs. We sang songs and I played the guitar though I can't really play it well. We did some games to keep ourselves awake until 3am. It was fa blast! Second Day: This morning I got up at 11 o'clock and had my brunch. A cup of coffee (with milk) and a chicken sandwich was enough to complete my morning. As soon as I stepped out of the hut, the rain started to pour So I ran quickly to the billiard hall where my cousins were playing billiard. I played with them and did quite well since playing billiard was my most favorite hobby last year. The rain continued until afternoon, so I got my laptop and tried connecting to the net and luckily I was connected. Thank goodness! And now I'm writing this notebook entry.

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Hi Joy, what a beautiful text have you writen!

My Tiny Paradise

First Day:
It was Saturday when we left home at around 10 o'clock in the morning to visit the place where I spent 18 years of my life. It took me about a year to be home again. When I got there, I was surprised to see how the place has was changed - from a plain island to a tiny paradise! The touch of the cool sea breeze seemed to welcome me with pleasure. The tall green trees reminded me of someone who always make me smile and I wished that he was with me to see how beautiful the surrounding was surroundings were. I could hear the chirping of the birds that sounded like a music in the air. The white sand that gave me peace of mind. The clear blue sky that made all things beautiful on that day.
At my back was a beautiful hut. When I went inside the hut, there was a bathroom, a bamboo chair, a small bedroom and a dirty kitchen. I had nothing to say but “wow.” I couldn't believe that I was in such a wonderful paradise.
A great deal of lunch was served. We feasted on seaweed salad, grilled pork and fish, shrimps, crabs, mangoes ( my favorite fruit) and bananas. It was perfect!
I think the best time was in the afternoon when the sunset touched the sand that created a glimmering yellow hue. I closed my eyes and thought for a while that it would be nice to hold hands with someone while walking along the shore. ( I missed him :<)
When the night came, we enjoyed the open sky and built a sand castle. We shared stories and laughed at the top of our lungs. We sang songs and I played the guitar though I can't really play it well. We did some games to keep ourselves awake until 3am. It was fa blast!
Second Day:
This morning I got up at 11 o'clock and had my brunch. A cup of coffee (with milk) and a chicken sandwich was enough to complete my morning. As soon as I stepped out of the hut, the rain started to pour So I ran quickly to the billiard hall where my cousins were playing billiard. I played with them and did quite well since playing billiard was my most favorite hobby last year.
The rain continued until afternoon, so I got my laptop and tried connecting to the net and luckily I was connected. Thank goodness! And now I'm writing this notebook entry.

A dirty kitchen looks good for you? :-)
"my most favorite hobby": Only can be a favorite hobby, therefore there isn't any comparison: "my favorite hobby".
I love to see you writing a such beautiful experience. After this, I think I will need to improve my English to talk properly with you! You've done it very well!

Regards,

Igor


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Joy, long time no see. How are you doing? I miss you. You are such a happy person. Your description is so vivid that I can picture it.
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Brent, it was great and I'm glad to make you smile. :) Mateusz, past is past. :) Time to move on. Thanks for that day you cheered me up!
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Brent, it was great and I'm glad to make you smile. :) Mateusz, past is past. :) Time to move on. Thanks for that day you cheered me up!
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mitch, sa Guimaras Island, mga 1 hour away lng sya sa Iloilo City. You shoudn't miss it. ^^

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