My diary(2 days)

2015, Sep. 3.
(There This is a my first English diary)
It was such a fine day that my son and I went to drive. We visited saw the Original Picture of Picture Book drawn by Kurokawa Mitsuhiro*. My son was very interested in these. I could tell because he smiled to look at the pictures. We had a good time.
I am studying English, because I'm not good. I may many errors.
Thanks!

Sep. 7.
It was a rainy day. My son, my father, my mother, and I went to an aquarium in Sendai. There were many fish, dolphins, frogs, and more.  

We saw the dolphins show. It was fun. The dolphins were high jump. We were had excited.
Thank you to for reading.

Very good for a first diary!

One thing to remember: after a sentence, you have to have a space after the period. If you don't, it looks very squished together and sometimes harder to read.

My diary(2 days)

2015, Sep. 3.
(There is a my first English diary)
It was such a fine day that my son and I went for a drive.We visited the Original Picture of Picture Book which  were drawn by KUROKAWA MITSUHIRO. My son was very interested in these. Because he smiled when he looked  at the pictures. We had a good time.
I am studying English, because I'm not good. I may any errors.
Thanks!

Sep. 7.
It was  a rainly day.My son, my father, my mother,and I went to an aquarium in Sendai.There were many fish, dolphins, frogs, and more.
We saw the dolphins show. It was fun. The dolphins jumped high. We were excited.
Thank you for reading.