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Rubbish 1 I've decided to write something for practicing English. The notes are not expected to have any sense. They are just sort of practice in free writing with aim to activate passive vocabulary. Anyway, I'd appreciate any correction in both grammar and word usage. Here is the first take Rubbish 1 --- It was late in a morning, particularly gloomy weather with a sharp and strong wind and a steady rain behind a window. The kind of morning in which it's especially hard to get up and take all that everyday-in-the-morning things. That sort of morning usually made impossible to feel any hope that the day will be lively and full of that small achievements which fulfill our live. The phone rang all of a sudden. Why not? The phone sometimes rang even when weather is unpredictably quite unpleasant. I notice that the phone could rang in any whether and sometimes I suspect the tastes of the phones are completely opposite to ones of any sensible person. For, you know, it seems as if they even like to rang in such a sudden way under such circumstances... Besides that they are, I mean phones, much like cats. So unpredictable and self-concern at the same time. Never care about the feelings of the owner, always are in need of some charge. They also usually fell like to suck out some money or time on regular basis or pull of something we usually have, I mean, in our fridge. I wonder why we still keep them at home or at pocket or whenever you prefer to keep it in.

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Wow, kooka. You did a very good job with your "rubbish", I hope to read more from you! The only real errors I noticed were that you used "a" instead of "the" in many places, along with a few spelling mistakes. I've corrected everything to the best of my ability, and added some notes on certain sections at the bottom. 

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It was late in a the morning, the weather was particularly gloomy* with a sharp, and strong wind and a steady rain behind a the window. The kind of morning in which it's especially hard to get up and take all that do all the everyday-in-the-morning things**. That sort of morning usually made makes it impossible to feel any hope that the day will be lively and full of that the small achievements which fulfill our lives.

The phone rang all of a the sudden. Why not?*** The phone sometimes rang even when weather is was unpredictable or quite unpleasant*. I notice that the phone could ring in any weather and sometimes I suspect the tastes of the phones are completely opposite to ones of any sensible person. For, you know, it seems as if they even like to rang in such a sudden way under such circumstances...

Besides that, they are, I mean phones, much like cats. So unpredictable and self-concerned at the same time. They never care about the feelings of their owner, and are always in need of some charge. They also usually feel like to suck out some sucking(?)** money or time on regular basis or pull of something pulling out stuff we usually have, I mean, in our fridge. I wonder why we still keep them at home, at in our pockets or whereever you prefer to keep it in***.

*it is much better to say this, instead of "particulary gloomy weather...", that sounds like you are trying to describe more about the weather such as "particularly gloomy weather lasting for days".

**you might find it best to say "morning routine", which means "the things you do in the morning". Such as, "My morning routine consists of turning on the coffee maker and switching the television to CNN." Had you said "morning routine" your sentence could have been, "The kind of morning in which it's especially hard to get up and start the morning routine".

***I would probably not say "Why not?" here. I think you might have been looking for a word like "Of course!" Here's an example of it used in another context: "I was really tired this morning and was on my way to the bathroom. All of the sudden I felt a sharp pain in my right toe. Of course! I had walked into a kitchen table leg on my way to the bathroom. My day couldn't have started out any worse!"

*Instead of saying "unpredictably quite unpleasant" (which sounds off to my ears) I think you might have meant "unpredictable or quite unpleasant", you could also remove one of those - making the weather "unpredictable" or making the weather "quite unplesant".

** "sucking money" sounds strange, I have never heard anything like that (maybe the British or Aussies say it, I'm not sure), but you might be better off saying something like "burning a hole in our pockets", which I know, sounds quite strange now - but you will hear it often - at least in my neck of the woods ;). So you could say: "I love this new cell phone, but it's burning a hole in my pocket!" which can be simplified as "I love this new cell phone, but it's really expensive!".

***It sounds much better if you leave off of the parts I stroke out.

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