Surprise

I have a cousin that is very close to me. She is my best friend. She has a boyfriend who lives in another city. Her boyfriend sent me messages two days ago saying that he wanted to come to our city in order to visit my cousin, but that he wanted to surprise her. So he asked me to set a date and go to a cafe and wait for him. Yesterday, I asked my cousin to go out with my friends and she accepted, but she was stressed. We went to the cafe, and my cousin asked me why my friends didn't come. Suddenly her boyfriend came and put his hands on her eyes. My cousin was completely shocked, and she couldn't say anything for several minutes. After this time she just asked me, " How? How did you do it?" and we just smiled. I think it was a very interesting surprise for her, and I appreciate her boyfriend.

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Surprise

Surprise!!!!

My cousin and I are very close together. She has a boyfriend living in another city. Her boyfriend sent me messages two days ago wanting to come to our city without telling my cousin to make her surprised. So, he asked me to be out with my cousin in a cafe. Yesterday, I asked my cousin to go out with my friends and she accepted it but she was stressed. We went to the cafe and my cousin asked me why my friends didn't come. Suddenly her boyfriend appeared and covered my cousin's eyes with his hands . My cousin was completely surprised of this. The time her BF uncovered her eyes she was really dead surprised and  couldn't say anything for several minutes. Later on,  My cousin asked me " How? How did you do it?" and we just giggled. I think it was a very interesting surprise for her and I appreciate her boyfriend for this.

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