is it all correct?

now i'm prepare speaking test
so i practice my english on this board.
so please check my script. thank you!


Hi, Jieun, It's jinsoo. I'm really sorry, I can't go to the concert.

Unfortunately, I had a bad cold yesterday.

So after lunch, I went to see a doctor,

The doctor said, "you have to rest at home." (there is no sentence before that would need contrasting, so don't use "but")

and then he gave me some pills to me.

but Now I have a bad fever and cough, so I can't go to the concert with you. I'm really sorry about that.

And If you want, I have until today to refund the tickets,  I can cancel the concert tickets until today, If you want, (You can "cancel a reservation", or "refund a ticket", but you can't "cancel a ticket")

but, If you don't mind, how about going to the concert with Tim instead?

After I ask to Tim, and I'll call you back, is it that okay?

Okay, so.. I should call to tim right now.

And I'll call you back after 5 minutes. Bye!

is it all correct?

now i'm prepare speaking test
so i practice my english on this board.
so please check my script. thank you!


Hi, Jieun, It's jinsoo. I'm really sorry, I can't go to the concert.

Unfortunately, I had a bad cold yesterday.

So after lunch, I went to see a doctor,

But doctor said, "you have to rest at home."

and then he gave some pills to me.

but now I have a bad fever and cough. So I can't go to the concert with you. I'm really sorry about that.

And I can cancel the concert tickets until today, If you want,

But, If you don't mind, how about going to the concert with tim?

After I'll call tim, and I'll call you back, is that okay?

Okay, so.. I should call tim right now.

And I'll call you back after 5 minutes. Bye!