Writing about my home town

My home town is located along the Han river. I have lived there for almost 15 years. First When I first moved here, I was a middle school student. My first impression was very cold and strange. My family tried to become accustomed to the new city.
In the winter, the landscape of my city and school gave me cold images. However, as became the spring arrived, I got used to my home town, And then I could so I was able to meet a lot of good people.

The biggest difference between my hometown and other area is that there are too many acadamies in my hometown. Specially My hometown is especially famous for education. Usually parents who live in here want to make their kids smart. Sometimes because of their parents, students have a lot of stress. At the late time, We can easily meet young students on the street.

[Good work.  Many of the corrections weren't for grammatical errors, but to make it sound more natural.]

And there are many good restaurants and very good park in my hometown. There is one of long stream: Yang- Jea stream. We could enjoy outdoor activities in there. For examples, soccer,tennis,running and walking a dog. There are many pet lover. And there are unique bathroom. The shape looks like a rocket. If you open the door of bathroom, you can listen the classic music, Yang-Jea stream is one of the must place if you visit my hometown.