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The very first time I have been to a bar To be honest, I am not old enough to go to a bar. But it's summer. Also I don't have to go to school as I am still on my summer holiday and I'm so bored because I have experienced all the entertainment which is suit my age. So, I decided to break a rule. You know, life will be much more intriguing when we break the rule. And I am young, I want to party. I wore a deep make up on and a sexy blue dress (it was quite short), curved my hair, it made me look 3 older, I looked like 20. I went with some of my friend. And, well, the sole remaining problem was how to prove that I was already older than 17 and absolutely could went to bar legally. It was the coolest bar in the city so it was very hard for troublemakers like me to get too. Fortunately, one of my friend who I went with have a sister doing the part-time job as a bar staff. She agreed to help us get into bar successfully providing that we agreed to obey her three rules: _ Do not hangover _ Do not hook up with guys _ If we are caught, we don't know her. Of course we accept those rules unconditionally lol And it's time said how amazing the bar was. EDM music was put on in the maximum volume, which was fantastic as hell. I danced, shook, screamed and sang out loud. My heartbeat became faster and seemed that it was likely to explode with happy and pleasant. All of my stress was completely combated. It felt like there were only music, my beloved girls, and I in the world, there wasn't no place for anxiety, worry, sad and problems. I was sort of drunk, despite of my promise to our cute sister. Anyway, come on, you can't stand drinking when you were night club. Not to mention, the alcohol, cocktail there were really delicious, really was. I want to be an adult... Night club, or bar, is not totally bad, it's a place to combat your stress effectively. I wish my parents known that. If you have never gone to a bar, take it a shot!! It's worth for trying...

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The very first time I have been to a bar

To be honest, I am not old enough to go to a bar, but it's summer. Also, I don't have to go to school as I am still on my summer holiday and I'm so bored because I have experienced all the entertainment which is suits my age. So, I decided to break a rule. You know, life will be much more intriguing when we break the rules. Also, I am young, and I want to party.
I wore a deep makeup on and a sexy blue dress (it was quite short), curled my hair, which made me look 3 year older, so I looked like 20. I went with some of my friends, and, well, the sole remaining problem was how to prove that I was already older than 17 and absolutely could go to a bar legally. It was the coolest bar in the city, so it was very hard for troublemakers like me to get in, too. Fortunately, one of my friends who I went with have a sister doing the part-time job as a bar staff. She agreed to help us get into the bar successfully providing that we agreed to obey her three rules:
_ Do not get a hangover
_ Do not hook up with guys
_ If we are caught, we don't know her.
Of course we accepted those rules unconditionally lol.
Now it's time to describe how amazing the bar was. EDM music was put on in the maximum volume, which was fantastic as hell. I danced, shook, screamed and sang out loud. My heartbeat became faster and seemed that it was likely to explode with happiness and good feeling. All of my stress was completely overcome. It felt like there were only music, my beloved girls, and I in the world, there wasn't any place for anxiety, worry, sadness and problems. I was sort of drunk, despite of my promise to our cute sister. Anyway, come on, you can't avoid drinking when you were night club. Not to mention, the alcohol and cocktails there were really delicious, they really were.
I want to be an adult...
Night club, or bar, is not totally bad, it's a place to combat your stress effectively. I wish my parents knew that.
If you have never gone to a bar, take it a shot!! It's worth for trying...

 

[Fairly good English.  About going to a bar, there are negatives as well as positives.  At least be aware of the negatives, too.]

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I am not going to correct your entry. I am writing to tell you how GOOD your writing is. You have a way with words and of telling a good story. I don't know what your plans are in life are, but I hope you keep on writing.

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