Well done Laia!! This is a really good, well structured argument. Most of the mistakes were using "phrases" that we use in debates like these, so take a look and try to use them again in your next piece of writing.

Let me know if you have any questions,

Tom

Essay

Nowadays people have a lot of ways for buying to buy different things such as clothes, item, electronic items, food, etc. For instance, (We only use "for instance" when we give just 1 example - so it sounds better just to start by saying "two of these ways"). Two of these ways are shopping online or going to the shops. But, which is the best option between these two?

On the one hand there is the price. For instance, if you buy at the shop, you will not pay the costs of having to send your purchases at home. Yet, sometimes there are sales, promotions or bargains online on the online shop, which you cannot find in the shop.

On the other hand there is the question of which possibility is more comfortable for the client. If you buy at the shop, you will have to go there. Nevertheless However, if you buy online, you haven’t don't have to go outside of the home.

As far as I am concerned, I prefer to go shopping because, in spite of having to go to I have to go until the shop, I like to see the items and for instance, if I have to buy a piece of clothing I can try it on without to have to return it if I dislike it.