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TOEFL Practice - The increase in the availability of information and its impact in the modern world
The rise of the internet brought many changes to the life we live today. It has many uses in our lives that we sometimes take it for granted: we chat with friends, we send emails to our relatives, we learn about what is going on in the world in real time, among other uses. More importantly, it provides access to almost an unlimited amount of information of different types. How has this aspect influenced today's world? In the next few lines, I will give some examples that reflect the influence of the net in modern life.
First, the scientific world has greatly benefited from the Internet, since now researchers can access investigations performed around the world and have a wider look at the phenomena studied. This was not possible in the past, academics had to solely rely on the bibliography available at their local libraries and the knowledge imparted by their professors. Nowadays, the net provides a platform where scientists can study at a global level, nourishing (glean information, gather information, extract information) from findings from an ample diversity of schools. This is very beneficial for today's world because it allows a (for) faster progress in the scientific field and also a deeper understanding of facts. This in turn has a great impact on the technology and tools that we use, improving the standards of people's lives.
Another clear example is the way businesses are run. Companies can access global opportunities that best fit their interest. They can also recruit the best employees around the world, improving their productivity. Not only corporations can take advantage, but also workers around the word, who can seek job opportunities overseas more easily. In the old days, people depended almost entirely on the information provided by local papers and local meetings.
In a similar vein, the almost uncensored access to information has created citizens more aware of current matters. Today it is common to see how some politicians have lost credibility for scandals such as money laundering and corruption. Of course this (these) types of bad deeds were also present in the past, but now they are more exposed. Especially important on this matter has been the advent of social networks such as twitter and facebook, where people can get updates on (in) real time and form their own opinion after considering many sources and views from other people.
*****You write quite well, it came out really naturel. I fixed a few of the mistakes here, nothing too bad. There are one or two others that I debated fixing or not but they made sense in the end. I didn't want to nitpick based on personal preference and style. Since your level is writing academic, I imagine you understand the corrections without explanation. The only one I would comment on is using 'nourishing'. I understand the use of the word and it isn't completely wrong, just a bit odd to me in the context of the article you wrote. I gave those few examples as alternatives.
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