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Could you please correct spelling and grammartical errors and unnatural expressions in the essay? Essay topic: "It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be." Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together. Essay: In modern society, families are not as close as they used to be in the past. There is a number of reasons why the phenomenon occurs. First of all, people in general have become busier than before and as a result, they have less time to spend with their family. In this modern society, many people spend the majority of their time on working and, their work and family commitments have increased. This makes it hard for people to visit their parents and relatives. Second of all, there are some social forces that have contributed to the phenomenon as well. For example, many people think that family traditions are not as important as before and big families such as nuclear family no longer exist. In addition, a grown-up person who lives independently away from his or her family is considered to be normal in modern society. As a consequence, many young people live away from their family when they become adults. Having more frequent family events and gatherings could be one way to bring families closer together. Meeting on a family member's birthday is a good time to get family members together. Moreover, it would be good to organise sporting events where all family members participate and enjoy playing sports. Perhaps the most important thing to bring families closer together would be to realise how important families are and to be ready to sacrifice their time. I have always been enjoying the time with my family and relatives on special days such as the New Year's day. We enjoy playing traditional games and eating traditional foods. I firmly believe that meeting on traditional days such as the New Year's day and Christmas would be the best to bring families closer together as they share common family traditions and culture.

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