Letter of application (please, help me!!)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing on account of the advertisement of the English Language School. ("language" needs to be corrected throughout)

I am particularly interested in the course that the school offers due to the fact that I have just finished my degree, and now, I have enough time to dedicate to studying English. Likewise, I
consider this lenguage essential for my future career and to move on abroad.

I started studying English when I was 16. After three years studying at secondary school, I went to a Lenguage School with the aim of getting a qualification. Unfortunately, i couldn´t get it because of my fluency in English was quite basic yet. Nevertheless, throughout those years, i learned to write more or less grammatically correctly in English. My main deficiency in  English is my inability to speak accurately and in a fluent way.

For that reason, I see this summer as the perfect moment to start to practice my speaking skills for at least one month at least, with the opportunity to talk to native people.

I hope you will consider my application favourably (this is the Brittish spelling) and if you need more details, please do not
hesitate to contact me.

I am looking forward to receiving your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Carmen

Letter of application (please, help me!!)

Dear Sir/Madam: ( I would put or between sir and madam)

I am writing on account of the advertisment of the English Language School.

I am particularly interested in the course that the school offers, due to the fact that I have just finished my degree and now, have enough time to dedicate towards studying English. Likewise, I
consider this lenguage essential for my future career and to move on abroad.

I started studying English when I was 16. After three years studying at secondary school, I went to a Language School with the aim of getting a qualification. Unfortunately, I couldn´t get it because of my fluency in English was quite basic. Nevertheless, throughout those years, I learned to write more or less grammatically correct in English. The main scarcity in the language is my ability to speak accurately and in a fluent way.

For that reason, I see this summer as the perfect moment to start to practice my speaking skills during one month at least, with the opportunity to talk to native people.

I hope you will consider my application favourable (If it is an American school you can change it to favorable) and if you need more details, please do not
hesitate to contact me.

I am looking forward to receiving your reply. (could also put response)

Yours faithfully,

Carmen

Letter of application (please, help me!!)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing in response to the advertisment of the English Language School.

I am particularly interested in the course that the school offers due to the fact that I have just finished my degree, and now, i have enough time to dedicate to studying English. Likewise, I
consider this language essential for my future career and to move on abroad.

I started studying English when I was 16. After three years studying at secondary school, I went to a language school with the aim of getting a qualification. Unfortunately, I couldn´t get it because of my fluency in English was still quite basic yet. Nevertheless, throughout those years, I learnt to write more or less grammatically correct in English. My main deficiency in the language is my ability to speak accurately and fluently.

For that reason, I see this summer as the perfect moment to start to practice (practise is the British spelling) my speaking skills for a mininum of one month, with the opportunity to talk to native people.

I hope you will consider my application favourably and if you need more details, please do not
hesitate to contact me.

I am looking forward to receiving your reply.

Yours faithfully,

Carmen