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Many people strongly believe that since there are lots of cases of overweight in humans who do not seem to die, that is not an actual issue. However, others such as doctors are deeply preoccupied about this problem.
First of all, is undeniable that drinking is a matter of concern in our society but, there are aspects which are more relevant in making people gain kilograms. Furthermore, alcohol in its majority affects liver mainly rather than height.
On the other hand, unhealthy food such as hamburgers from McDonalds, play a key role in the overweight subject. Therefore, if harmful fats are removed in that type of food, it would be less damaging for us consuming them.
As for supermarket goods, an urgent action is needed to reduce its high levels in sugar and fats. Moreover, their prices tend to be low, producing by this way a huge amount of sales
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To sum up, in order to solve this issue, companies should take several actions which lead us to a difficult solution. Unfortunately, it is all in their hands.
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