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facing difficulties bravely face difficulties bravely I was very sick eight years ago. most of doctors thought I would hardly walk or write anything because I had to stay in bed every day.but I always believe the sun will rise tommorrow. I still smile at myself even if life will be out. I feel happy because I never waste my precious life.I had to look for the best way for my illness by myself because I think patient is the best doctor as they know themselves more clearly.and I had to read a lot of chinese medical books .in the end , I decided to practice shaolinqigong staying in bed., at the same time, and to eat the food which it is good for my illness. I felt better and better, afterwards , I walked outside to exerise every day. indeed, I found a pretty healthy liftstyle. I realize that the illness has brought more fortune in spirit to me. it will train you with some difficulties in life. anyway, everyone should face it bravely. the difficluties will come either you smile at them or cry with , we will face the difficulties bravely , smiling.

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Thumbs up! Was it hard practicing qigong on your bed? You are absolutely fabulous.
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Facing difficulties bravely

Face difficulties bravely

I was very sick eight years ago. Most of doctors thought I would hardly walk or write anything, because I had to stay in bed every day.  But I always believe the sun will rise tomorrow. I still smile at myself even if life will passes on. I feel happy, because I never wasted my precious life.  I had to look for the best way solution for my illness, by myself, because I think the patient is the best doctor.  as they know Patients understand themselves more clearly than anyone else.  and I had to read a lot of chinese medical textbooks.  In the end, I decided to practice shaolin qigong staying in bed.  At the same time, and I began to eat the foods, which it is were good for my illness. I felt better and better.  Afterwards, I walked outside everyday to exercise.  Indeed, I found it to be a pretty healthy lifestyle. I realized that the illness has brought forth more spiritual fortitude within spirit to me.
It will train you to deal with some of life's difficulties in life. Anyways, I feel everyone should face it illness bravely. Difficulties will come and go,either whether you smile or cry with them.  We will might as well face the difficulties bravely smiling.

Comment:  This is another thoughtful essay.  It has a lot of good things to say.  It has alot of 용기, which means courage in Korean.  The only things that I changed were some verb tenses and common english phrases (i.e. "come and go").  Let me know if I changed your words too much!

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