The Live
Today, I enjoyed the live which held light music circle as an audience. It was very exciting and performance was so cool!! My part is bass. I didn't take part in the live as a performer but I was stimulated their performances.I'll practice harder and show my best performance in the next live!!
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The Live
Today, I enjoyed tThe lLive, which held had a light small music circle as an audience. It was very exciting and the performance was so cool!! My part is bass [An alternative would be to say, "I play bass", or "Bass is my part"]. I didn't take part in the live as a performer but I was stimulated [you could use other words here instead of stimulated. E.g. encouraged; motivated] by their performances. I'll practice harder and show give my best performance in the next lLive!!
Note: if "The Live" is the name of an event, then it should always begin with capital letters so that it is "The Live" instead of "the live". This way the reader does not get confused.
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Hi Shunsuke, I have made a few corrections to your note. Overall it was a good, very little mistakes. To be very critical, my only point would be to make it clear what the subject of your note is at the start. For example, I would explain what The Live is first before stating the kind of audience that attended. If you have any questions at all, feel free to ask me.
次のLIVEでがんばってね!
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