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A Perfect Night Like usual, I went for jogging at 8 the evening. Through the dim light, I could see the couples kissing on the lawn while I jogged around. I could almost hear slightly giggles, like the sound of wind chimes. Although, I had earphones, with strong beats hitting my head. After a few laps of the track, the sweat was pouring off. I kinda lost control of my body, I knew the music in my ears was loud, but I couldn't feel it. I couldn't help but ran faster and faster. The whole world seemed to stand still, except the running me. I couldn't remember how I went back to dorm, maybe I ran, maybe I crawled. When my mind came back, I was sitting by the window, my clothes were all wet. But I couldn't move, soreness was all over my body. I took off all my clothes, nakedly bending over the window. It's summer night, I thought I could hear the cicadas singing. But nothing, it was deadly silent, only the wind gentle blowing. Leaned on the window, gazing up at the stars in the dark blue sky, I smiled, reasonlessly. When I looked at my watch, it was 2am, the whole world was simply perfect. I thought to myself, no sleep tonight..... When I opened my eyes, I was bending over the window, dazzling light made me squint. I heard birds singing, in the direction of the willow in front of my window, I saw few little nameless birds. My finger reached the blanket on my back, I turned back, she was still sleeping, peacefully. I could see the slightly smile on her mouth. I checked the watch, it was 6 at the morning. Waiting, Waiting for her waking up. Then go to school together, dear roomie.

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A Perfect Night

Like As usual, I went for jogging at 8 in the evening. Through the dim light, I could see the couples kissing on the lawn while I jogged around. I could almost hear* slightly giggles, like the sound of wind chimes, even Although I had earphones, with strong beats, hitting my head.

After a few laps of the track, the sweat was pouring off me. I kinda 'sort of' lost control of my body, I knew the music in my ears was loud, but I couldn't feel it. I couldn't help but run faster and faster. The whole world seemed to stand still, except the running me.* 

I couldn't remember how I went/got back to dorm, maybe I ran, maybe I crawled. When my mind came back/recovered, I was sitting by the window, my clothes were all wet. But I couldn't move, soreness was all over my body.* 

I took off all my clothes, nakedly bending over the window. It's a summer night, I thought I could hear the cicadas singing. But nothing, it was deadly* silent, only the wind gently blowing*. Leaninged on the window, gazing up at the stars in the dark blue sky, I smiled, reasonlessly.* 

When I looked at my watch, it was 2am, the whole world was simply perfect. I thought to myself, no sleep tonight.....

When I opened my eyes, I was bending over the window, dazzling light made me squint. I heard birds singing, in the direction of the willow in front of my window, I saw a few little nameless birds.

My finger reached the blanket on my back, I turned back, she was still sleeping, peacefully. I could see the slightly smile on her mouth. I checked the watch, it was 6 at in the morning.

Waiting, waiting for her to wakeing up. Then go to school together, dear roomie.

 

* 'almost hear', and 'slightly hear' are different, in that 'almost' suggests that you cannot actually hear, but you can imagine hearing, while 'slightly' implies that you can actually hear a slight sound.

*except myself running ;  the words you use, though, are more poetic 

*soreness permeated my whole body

*deathly silent

*or  only the gentle blowing of the wind

*for no reason, without reason, gratuitously

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I don't understand why you guys react in this way....
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I wonder how many friend requests you'll get after this entry??? ))))))))
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Phil you're so funny (,") I wanted to say something, but you said it all :D
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Is everybody from Zhongshan strange, or just some of the people?

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